Just Know This - Comments

A really powerful story. At first Iw as going to suggest a larger vocabulary to construct stronger images but I'm glad this isn't overly wordy, it hleps set a vibe and communicates the sheer emotion behind the words you wrote. My only really critique is to maybe grab a thesaurus and change a couple of words that get repeated a tad too often. I know it got a bit distracting when you repeated the word life quite a few times within a few sentences. But other than that, really powerful. I'm glad I got a chance to read this :)

Rise against. <3

This was beautiful. But it's so sad. He needs to get back with her! Anyway, it's just lovely. The layout is gorgeous yet so simple. I felt for her. As if I was her. But I have to say that the fact that she accepted him no matter what the mistakes me made were made me smile. I mean, it's just beautiful.

I've never had a boyfriend but for some reason I felt as if I was in her shoes. You know? I love your grammar.

This was absolutely fabulous, in a macabre sort of way.The way you wrote the story describes exactly the kind of pain that the character is going through, and it is very relateable, since nearly every girl will have to experience that moment when they still love someone who might have gotten over the relationship. The first paragraph was a wonderful way to start, getting straight to the point in a sentimental way.

My heart actually started breaking a little, and you know you did good when you make the reader have a genuine emotional response

That was really sad. It takes a lot to make me feel sad while reading sad stories but you did. I can relate to this story in someway and I think its good that you made it to where people can relate to this story.

You can feel the sadness in this story, the hurt also. I also like the title, it caught my eye. I love how you used the lyrics in the story, I love that song.

This was really good :)

oh geesh, these mibba people are stupid for not commenting on this. This was a masterpiece <3 I can feel your pain </3! cheer up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is lovely =)