February 20th, 2012 at 05:25pm
I love love love the banner! It’s a stunning picture.
I really like the imagery you begin with, it’s a powerful start and although the idea may be overused, your words paint it fresh. I like the way you have the wind speak properly it throws the reader in with the characters and makes it more realistic.
I like the length of this, because you put a lot of emotion behind each scene. You’re able to go into great detail without disrupting the plot or overusing words which is a great effect. I think you explained the relationship well – a lot would be lost from more explanation as we wouldn’t have the mystery to help the piece along. However, the name is pretty confusing as to how it would link to the story, that’s the only fault.
Her emotions were so relatable to anyone who's ever gone through a rough relationship/break up. Serious kudos to you; I'm still blown away.