One Day You'll Know - Comments

This was sooo cute.
Furthermore, I loved the layout. It's very pretty.
I like the way you described things.

They only issue I had with it was this sentence:
"The truck slows to a stop with a young man with a clean shaven face and short light brown hair in a lilac button front and dress pants."

It just sounds strange when I read it aloud.

I love this. Not even kidding. It's precious. I love how breezy and descriptive it is, and I love how the two are getting married. That's just soooo sweet. The summary is very intense as well and immediately caught my attention. However... it is a bit of a run-on sentence. Maybe revise that a little bit? Or if it's meant to be that way, cool. It gives it personality. Their relationship is so sweet and light, kinda like... yogurt. Forgive my lack of a better term.

The layout is stunning. I love the color scheme. It makes the story even more enjoyable, plus it is very easy to read and original. I can't wait for an update! Glad I swapped for this!

The banner was pretty and so was the layout all though I'm not a big fan of the note background to the side. The only thing I wanted to point out was She can’t hide the excitement in the raised register of her voice. Was I the only one who thought that to be a little odd? I had to re-read and try to get back to the easy flow you had in the beginning. It just put me off a bit is all.

I swear, I just D'awww-ed so much when I read that she was marrying him and why she was marrying him, her reasons. I like how easy their relationship is so far and how they're both playful with each other. I thought this was nice, it was really cute! It was great to read and I saw no grammar/spelling mistakes.

Heroo :)

So first things first, What I see. I think that the bright green was a bit much for my eyes >.< So maybe a lighter color?

The story by itself was A. DORE. A. BLE. Usually cutesey stuff like this makes me wanna barf all voer my Ma, but this I could handle xD

You have really good imagery, and mgiht I say, GREAT flow. It made the story very enjoyable to read. Great job! <3

First I gotta say
Love the layout
Also I love the concept you have with the lined-paper look it has.

Now with your story
Ok first I thought this was a very unique idea
Also liking the fact you chose a rural area instead of a city.
Makes it all the more sweet.
I'm wondering this: Are you gonna make this a chaptered story or like a short story/One-shot?

Only problem I got, is the font is hard to read but maybe it's just me
Probably most likely me, dont go changing it alright? :D
My eyes aren't very good hehe

Anywho, I can't wait to see more
This seems really realistic and characters are nice.
Keep up the good work
<3

i love the layout, it's really cute aha and might i add, you're writing is VERY unique and i love it.

I like the setting for this, very rural and country. And how the guy is playfully gullible at times. And the girl oh man she seems incredible sweet and lovely.

I look forward into reading more of this. :D

COMMENT.
VIRGINITY.

They must have a triply microwave. Mine takes at least 4 minutes for the water to heat up.
That aside, this was wonderful and cute. Of course, your summary put a damper of foreboding on it, but it was still cute, all the same.

They're getting married. <3 I love that. It's so cute. I hardly see a story where the characters are getting married right off the bat, so it's refreshing and wonderful. And they're so fluffy. I like the way they joke around. I want to be able to joke around like that.

Lilac and steel. Interesting color scheme. I love how she's already planned that without him. And he's just like, whatever. Lol.

This was just so cute. And it makes me tear up cause I know something's gonna go wrong. Haha.