February 19th, 2012 at 02:56pm
This was amazing!
I find it so amazing how you just got into the mind of a elementary girl and just wrote it out so well. Her age is a mystery, but the way you potrayed her is above the age if 5 yet under the average pubery age. I was surprised when you stated that she was in a wheelchair. Yet, the relationship you stated Emilia had with her dog was very touching and sweet. It just seemed so raw like you have a personal experience.
I really liked this story - it was so sad, but really sweet too. I loved how you managed to write from a child's point of view, which is something I've hardly ever seen on Mibba. I can imagine that it was quite hard to get into the mindset of a young child, but it was very convincing. The description was consistently good throughout, and my favourite line was the first couple of sentences about the window - I thought it set the scene really well, and created a really good image. The story flowed well, and I don't think there were any spelling or grammar mistakes either, which was nice. Overall, it's a really good story. :)