July 28th, 2015 at 01:33pm
C.S.
Feedback before I started reading: Very nice lay-out, simple and easy reading. I really like that and I hadn't read a single letter when I noticed it.
I did like the story a lot too! I love part with meeting the 'old hag'. Your writing is fantastic and I hope you keep it up like you have. I'm impressed.
I like your characters, especially Lotus. A lot of people find it difficult to write characters with such prominent flaws and aren't the sterotypical female lead. The mystery surrounding her back story is nice, what happened to her family, why does she live the way she does, why does she act the way she does, it keeps the reader interested and makes them continue to read. Too many questions are bad for a story, a reader gets bored when they aren't rewarded with answers but you've engulfed Lotus in the right level of mystery.
There is a nice balance of description and talking, it feels natural and fluid. The descriptions themselves are also very well done, I enjoyed reading this. Well done:)