The background doesn't really match your photo, as a side note. This is really interesting. I love well written apocalyptic stories and this definitely fits the bill. Not going to lie, when I was reading the first chapter I definitely kept thinking that Duke was a dog, no idea why I literally kept picturing a dog standing by her side pointing his nose like a hunting animal. The repetition of 'Duke went off to find whatever it was that caught his attention' sticks out like a sore thumb. It really breaks your flow but other than that I couldn't find a problem. Great work.
March 5th, 2012 at 01:28am