I read this a couple amount of times to really grasp everything in this and still felt the same things as when I read it the last time. It was good at first, but then towards the end I got confused. It may not be your writing and it could just be my blanking mind, but I got confused nonetheless. The plot was good in the beginning, and it flowed pretty well from there until it got to the breaker, which is where it got confusing and didn't flow as good as the first half of it did. I wish I had seen what had happened when Delilah woke up to see Matt in handcuffs, and I know it was in first person but I had hoped that she would wake up before that and see a potential Jimmy/Matt struggle before the police came. It also seemed as if Delilah was in love with both Jimmy and Matt, which didn't bother me, I just wish it had been brought up somewhere. The interactions between the characters didn't seem too real towards the end, but I liked the descriptions that you gave throughout it all. The flashbacks were a nice touch to the oneshot, which I enjoyed because it gives more insight to the characters. I enjoy domestic violence stories and they made me happy inside to read the suffering. (Which sounds extremely bad... I don't mean harm to anyone. xD) The length of it was rather short, which bothered me a tiny bit, but it was good besides the things I found in it. I liked reading it and I want to thank you for joining my contest once again. :)
It also seemed as if Delilah was in love with both Jimmy and Matt, which didn't bother me, I just wish it had been brought up somewhere. The interactions between the characters didn't seem too real towards the end, but I liked the descriptions that you gave throughout it all.
The flashbacks were a nice touch to the oneshot, which I enjoyed because it gives more insight to the characters. I enjoy domestic violence stories and they made me happy inside to read the suffering. (Which sounds extremely bad... I don't mean harm to anyone. xD)
The length of it was rather short, which bothered me a tiny bit, but it was good besides the things I found in it. I liked reading it and I want to thank you for joining my contest once again. :)