Hurricane Heart - Comments

Hurricane Heart, where do I begin?
At first I had a nagging feeling that I wouldn't like this as much as I liked the first book. Wow was I wrong! In fact by the end, I liked this even more.
Again, your descriptive skills were quite remarkable in this story, I even think they were better. I must admit, I didn't ever develop a love for Arjan, it was merely a fondness for his sheer will and spirit and ability to scrape through everything, but Hurricane stole the show for me. She was a complex character who went through so much change and we all know that readers are suckers for that type of thing!
And the Soulless? Well I can't tell you how much those freaked me out in a great way. In fact yesterday I went to an underground carpark with my friends and they looked on in confusion as I whined of how creeped out I was that Soulless were going to appear! (I gave them the link to start reading the Dreamers books too!)
Your description of the Soulless were what really inspired me. You are a very talented writer.

So this is it. The end of this book.
I don't even know what I'm feeling right now. I am speechless.
The end was everything I wanted and so much more. Everything has been great and I can't wait reading the new book with new characters although I'm probably going to miss these two :)

OH HOLY CHRIST JESUS SOMEONE HOLD ME.
asdfasidhalsjdlasj;oda;osdjpiasud asduh. The ending was absolutely fantastic; you had no need to worry about it being satisfactory or whatever because it was way, way above my expectations and they were pretty high. And the darlings have finally seen the light and they're together and we know names and the Soulless are running away with their tails between their legs for the time being and GAH. I feel happy for you that you've written something so amazing, if that's not weird. I loved this story (obviously) either way.

'but I had still shot him...shot him without even thinking about it. What was I turning into?' and then, 'Emerging from the shadows of the bridge and into the orange light of the streetlamps, his gun raised and aimed, was Arjan.' asdfghjkl aisdhusdfvaisgiuaei;;;;sdfkasdf character development. Fucking superb, fangirl-fit-inducing character development right there. I applaud you, I really do.
Aside from that, I really must congratulate and feel extreme envy over your simply amazing imagination. Like, seriously, I don't know how you think of all this because it is truly unreal and awesome and it made my day which is quite a task because I have an essay due. And WHY ONLY ONE CHAPTER LEFT? Like, what am I supposed to do? How in God's name am I gonna handle what I expect to be a glarjgdfg ending since no way can it not be?
Really, I just adore this. If you ever get it published - which you should but y'know - I will be first in line to buy it.

I'm from comment swap. I loved how the summer was written. I noticed that this a second book. I read the first couple of paragraphs before deciding that I wasn't able to read it. I didn't understand somethings. I'm going to take a look at the first book. I like you writing style however it flows really well.

I believe the fight scene does make sense although it's not like I've ever actually been in a fight including guns - although my next door neighbour got a bullet through his window in a gang fight - so what do I know? xD Also, I really hope Anke doesn't die because she's so sweet with Mark :( I guess it spurred Arjan on to 'join' the side of the Dreamers, though...

Hurricane's a little trigger happy, isn't she? Although, I suppose it's justified so it's cool. But Arjan when he was angry and betrayed = 30 or so seconds of me having to run away from my computer and around so my heart would stop hurting.
Hurricane saying Elize was a hypocrite made me laugh. She seemed so indignant, even though it's just words on a screen.

Holy goddamn. For a second there, I thought Hurricane might seriously get away with it but then that guy appears and it's all gone tits up. If you'll pardon the phrasing. But anyway, I'm wondering what is going to happen next and what the dickens the Soulless' plan is as once again you have me completely stumped... Excellent work, though!

I can't. I really can't. My (or rather your) poor, darling Arjan. Everything just sucks for him at the moment, doesn't it? He's been caught by the Soulless, he's kind of destined for the Institute, they have a knife which is scary and horrible and he thinks Hurricane doesn't love him! I mean, I'm not entirely sure myself that she completely does or actually wants to but there is some true fondness, at least :(

Nice update (: I completley agree though, I feel so bad for Arjan - he's been through so much, it seems like it'll never go right with him and Hurricane.

This chapter is just one long, big, painful cliffhanger with suspense and tension and suddenness. But you've made it flow so nicely and the description is so pretty and the detail of the fighting so delightful that I can't bring myself to resent it.

I have an exam in English tomorrow and I should study but I convinced myself that reading a story in English equals studying. But who am I kidding? I can't focus on grammar while something so intense and interesting is going on in here.
The thing you said about soulless using imagination gets you thinking. It's like they don't realize they use imagination almost as much as the Dreamers do or they believe it's something only they deserve or I'm just rambling and should just press the "Submit" button.

NO WAY. No freaking way. Arjan's dreams being like the instructions on how to lead the revolution? Inference and deduction actually coming in handy in real life. My God. Bloody hell. I can't even. Mind = blown.

The more and more I read this, the more I become convinced that I am reading a book. Your ideas are well developed, you have the perfect balance of action and character development and what's even more rare, is that your sequel isn't dragging out the story unnecessary. In fact, after reading this chapter I can picture you writing at least two more sequels (: This is soo much better than a lot of the superficial stories on mibba, please don't stop writing! x

Well thank God for that, I was getting worried there!
No, really, it's okay. In a strange way, I like cliffhangers getting dragged out because then the suspense is really bad... but good. And oh my God FINALLY WE FOUND OUT :D Of course, Hurricane's story is very tragic and I felt she deserved another of my fictional character hugs but still! How epic is her story or what? Like seriously, for her it's awful but for me as the reader it's a serious case of no way, man, that so totally rocks. Hurricane's a rather good story teller - the background information on other Soulless names was fascinating.
'I was in love now, as much as I wanted to get out. I loved Arjan. HELL YES. FEELS SO MANY FEELS. asdfghjkl. My heart. My poor, poor heart, what have you done with it. I know this can't last but I don't even care at the moment because it's so beautiful and rather casually thrown in there which is just so much like actual thoughts. AND SHE ADMITTED IT, GODDAMN.
Also, congratulations for the continuity of Arjan's mood. Some writers just drop things like that the moment there's an apology which is stupid because c'mon, no one gets over things that easy.

Oh for the love of God, you can't do that to me! D: First of all, I was honestly scared that Arjan might be seduced and I mean, no, that just can't happen. Although, Hurricane was being her usual badass self so that was okay and I thought maybe things were gonna be okay because she's badass when things are going well-ish. AND THEN SHE STARTED CRUMBLING AND EVERYTHING and Arjan was angry and I'm usually all my poor baby Arjan, come here away from meanie Hurricane but today I wanted to give Hurricane the hug I reserve for fictional characters. Talk about surprise!
And through all this, kind of lessening the argh why sweeties-ness, was the curiosity because maybe we're finally finding out about Hurricane? Ja? May I add your description/prose in general was phenomenal in this chapter? Because it really was.
Sorry if this seems a little incoherent. My brain is mushy because of muggy pre-thunderstorm-y-ness.

Hurricane was super badass in this one:D
Scarrus' name reminded me of an animal and the more I concentrated on it, I found it was Scar from Lion King, which is weird because I didn't even remember his name until googling the film because I've only seen the movie once - about a year ago (some children are just not grown up with these films). Sorry, if that came out all over the place but the point is: brain is one freaky thing :D
I know the comment is 95% irrelevant, but that's just how I roll :D But as always, I loved this magnificent story :)

Oh God, Arjan, come here you sweet darling! It's okay. You were badass and you did what you needed to and Hurricane will come and it'll all be good again. Except it won't because there's like six books in this series so obviously that can't happen but that's okay because I kind of love this story so your pain becomes less important to me.
Arjan doesn't actually exist but I feel bad admitting that. May I mention the Soulless are scary as?

You know, you're really quite excellent when it comes to writing exciting stuff like this. Some writers can only do the calm or the emotional but mess up when it comes to exciting - they get muddled and give their characters octopus syndrome etc. However, you can do calm, emotional and action! Congrats!
Also, it's really nice because I have absolutely no idea what the outcome of the impending 'storm' will be. Usually I have a hunch by now.

First: Hell yes, Arjan being badass!
Second: I think I can forgive Hurricane. Especially if she goes to find Arjan... But also because she feels bad and I feel bad for her. And because it's Hurricane and she's cool. I do hope it's not a suicide mission, though, because it'd be pretty sad if she dies.
Third: Aw yeah, the return of Casper! I missed him, slightly rash reactions and all.