I forgot to mention: I loved the description you used in the way you described your characters, what they smelled like, without giving away too much about how they look, which I always like because I like to imagine how the characters look in a story. Most authors can only describe a characters, which gets kinda boring after a while, and they never tell you how the characters sees things, or what they smell, or decribe the setting with enough detail. But you give just enough without giving too much of a long explanation and boring people. I think my favorite line was: "Short and stocky with clothes that smelled like the refuse pit." I liked that because I could get an image in my head, and that''s always a good thing to happen when you're reading a story
December 31st, 2011 at 05:13am