The story sounds interesting so far =) With new friendships already forming, it's only a matter of time until Jimmy, Johnny and the others find out about the home situation of the sister I kinda have the feeling that sooner or later, the mom won't be home and one of the girls is going to be her father's target, just a feeling though I can't wait for more Hope you guys update soon =)
Ps. In chapter 2, you switched from third person view (he, she and so on) to first person (i). Either indicate the change or use one of the two third or first. I thought that you should know =)
With new friendships already forming, it's only a matter of time until Jimmy, Johnny and the others find out about the home situation of the sister
I kinda have the feeling that sooner or later, the mom won't be home and one of the girls is going to be her father's target, just a feeling though
I can't wait for more
Hope you guys update soon =)
Ps. In chapter 2, you switched from third person view (he, she and so on) to first person (i). Either indicate the change or use one of the two third or first. I thought that you should know =)