Pretty Poison - Comments

Thank you very much for entering. I enjoyed the premise immensely, the idea that dear Party Poison sells his body to the night is wonderful, I can just imagine how it works. Plus, as you put it ‘He found it somehow fitting, being desirable venom and intoxicating people in the drunk of a party.’ he fit so well. I like how he practically fell into the occupation, and how he’s hiding it from his friends, this dirty little secret he is keeping, wonderful. And that the stink of sex hung with him, lol, and that he blamed it on Frankie and lack of showers, brilliant.

I also really liked the fact that Bert seemed quite into Gerard, that he was kissing and touching, that he was a tactile ‘lover’, that he connected and didn’t just use Gerard. And also, sex on a car bonnet, beautiful, hee hee. And also that this was the first time that Gerard had ever enjoyed it so. I really enjoyed the dynamic between the two of them, and that promise at the end. Very wonderful, indeed.

So hi. I don't really read killjoy fics much because they aren't one of my favorite verses but I think you did really well with this one. It's the first story on here I've ever read where Bert hasn't been a complete asshole, although he still had that element of asshole seeing as he basically raped Gerard. You do good with the amount of detail, having just enough without having long, pointless description. I like when the author gives enough to give the reader an idea of where they are, but leaves most of the picturing up to them. All in all good job, it was definitely worth reading.