Wishful Thinking - Comments

  • KnifeInTheCrayonBox

    KnifeInTheCrayonBox (200)

    United States
    I've never seen this show, or book or whatever this fandom is before, but I liked this. Although, one things confused me: what is a shadow hunter? Might be a good idea to kinda explain that for the people who don't know this fandom, although that's not really the main focus of the story, so I don't know if people will really care or not. Second, I loved Isabella. She seems like a really, independent girl. You wrote your characters well and described their looks good (although, that may not mean much, considering I don't know what they look like) but I could just imagine Magnus in my head. I didn't see any obvious grammar mistakes, so good job with that. All in all, it was pretty good, and had a good message at the end-you don't need a man to complete you. Good job! =)
    January 2nd, 2012 at 11:33pm