Malachite Eyes - Comments

This is beautiful.

I adored this. Your imagery and descriptions are lovely. You know how to incorporate emotion into your work and your author's voice flows well throughout the entire piece. I didn't notice any grammar errors either.

It might be because I'm going through a Doctor Who phase, but I definitely connected the two with "I can take you places you've never been."

This was passionate. It was the love scene without the sex, giving enough to the reader to gain that heavy lidded, love haze and keeping enough away for them to imagine it themselves.

I'd love to see a sister piece in the man's perspective. I get the feeling that she is far more into him than he is into her, but it might be because it is from the woman's perspective. Perhaps he just loves differently?

Overall, great work. I really enjoyed it!

Oh, and just a reminder to mark this as complete (since you haven't yet)!

I thought this was super cute. The descriptions were beautiful and interesting. I love short, sweet and simple stories. They are my favorite because there's so much to them that don't meet the eye and even though the story has ended, it never really ends. The guy with the green eyes seemed so mysterious and it worked here. Neat story for sure.

i like. is there more?

This is wonderful, and I haven't even seen the movie. :D