Homeless - Comments

I really liked the way you started out with the setting. It gave me a clear view of her situation. I honestly like reading stuff like this. It really isn't all fun and games in the streets and your writing portrays that very well. I didn't find any grammar mistakes or faults of any kind. I hope you continue writing with such....finesse. :) Good job!

I liked it (: the writing style and the details were awesome. I'm sure there's a few things you could improve on, but so far I'm not sure what that could be. I don't know why this doesn't have any comments yet. I hope to hear more like this soon !(:

I don't think I have ever read anything like this on here. It's really interesting, to me, to read something like this from the point of view of the homeless girl. It makes me sad that she even has to consider dumpster diving for her next meal, especially with her little baby to feed as well. It shocked me that she was so young, because when I think of homeless people I don't think people in her age category. I think old men that are drunk all the time; not a young woman in the prime of her life with a baby. But I think that's what makes this such a great piece; I like reading something and think I have a good idea on where it's going and then getting completely thrown off.

It's nicely written and I saw few mistakes. They weren't major and I'm not going to point them out because I don't think they take anything away from this.

Overall, I thought this was really nice! :)