August 6th, 2012 at 07:51am
I really like this! At first, I wasn't too sure about it (probably because I was in a bad mood at one point) but it really pulled me in! Teal is such an interesting main girl character. She's not annoying or hard to relate to. Of course we don't know a whole lot about her but she's a very real and unique! I found it hilariously ironic that Teal is the author of that book that Julian thinks is atrocious.
The thing that I like most about this is your writing style. After reading Winter Wakes, which you started a while ago, I've noticed that you have really improved. You've really come a long way!
The only mistakes I've noticed is only near you're dialogue. Sometimes you would put a period instead of a comma. Sometimes you would fail to capitalize or forget to do so as well. But it's nothing a little editing won't fix.
I can't wait to see where you go with this! Keep up the good work!
I doubt I’ve ever read a story like this before, but holy crap, this needs to have more love than it has already. This is absolutely amazing. Julian and Teal are such awesome characters; they shine, even if we don’t know much about them at this point in the story. I like that Julian one of those kind-of-serious characters, and Teal is just an all-around fun character to read about. This off-setting of personalities in these characters really add something to the story; your descriptions of them in this are so vivid and lovely. I wish I could pull all of that off, haha.
Anyways, I greatly enjoyed what I’ve read so far. I’m definitely subbing and reccing this and will return to read more chapters when I can. Great job! (: <3