A Monster - Comments

I like this! I have no idea who Ben is but the story was fantastic, and really unique. It had a lot of description for 3000 something words and was really visual. I could really see what was going on and the emotions were really strong. There's one paragraph with a POV mistake tho:

His apartment was messy. Some psychopaths were OCD, and some were messy. Ben was messy, and Rae was neither. She wasn’t obsessive about keeping her apartment clean, but she didn’t want to live like Ben did. The apartment was small. I could see the kitchen, bedroom and living room by just walking in. It was a one bedroom apartment.

It went from 'she' to 'I'. Anyway, another great story from you. Can't wait for more~

"Oh bloody hell." That was amazing! Definitely hot, dark, and sexy! I'm so happy you made a Ben Bruce one shot!!!! >.< He's such a gorgeous piece of 'arse'. Haha. My English probably sucks too. LoL. There was so many moments in the story I had to re-read over and over again. XD