Dreamcatcher - Comments

The layout is really beautiful; I like how the colors offset each other.
Your writing is fabulous, just from the summary. It was like I couldn't read it fast enough, and your descriptions are amazing.

"...considering that the willowy girl’s eyes still had a glint of mischief swimming in a pool of shining bright green irises."

This was one of my favorite lines (among others). Also, as for chapter one, Jade seems like a complete b*tch. I'd expected her to be the cliche "perfect older sister" but you totally blew that out of the water. Thank you for giving me something I didn't expect (:

Well chapter 2 sure had a steamy start xD
"A pause more pregnant than Jade could ever claim to be filled the room."

That line made me laugh harder than it probably should have...
I'm a little confused by what happened in this chapter, but I'm sure you have a reason for it. And that's why I'll be subscribing, because I'm excited to see what happens next!

I agree with all the comments.
The layout is wonderful and the idea is very original for me.
You got another subbie c:

The layout: It's really cute. I love all of the colors used and the banner picture is just amazing.
The title: The title seems to fit everything oh so well, especially with the banner picture going along with it.
The summary: It's kind of on the long side, but it isn't necessarily a bad thing.
The story: This is really great. I love it.

Overall, great job. (Sorry if this comment sucks, I'm a bit distracted).

This is great. And by the way, your comment on my story was splendid so I hope to live up to the excellent standard you have set, and I apologize if I don't! First, I want to point out my favorite line of the story:

For a girl who was barely floating in the middle of the pack that dominated the moderate to average end of the grading scale, she was unbelievably condescending.

I don't know why, but this way of describing someone just... it just stuck out to me. This line told me, 'This girl knows her writing stuff, and you are going to enjoy this a lot.' You have a way with descriptions that I don't see very often, and that includes novels I read as well as stories I've read online. You describe things the way I wish I could, but sadly cannot. Very impressive. I noticed this again later, when you described a doorknob as an 'ornate brass doorknob.' Maybe to you that doesn't seem like something, but to me the picture you've painted of not only that doorknob, but the entire room based on that small description, is incredibly impressive.

I love the layout, too. The yellow reminds me of sunshine and I just like that for some reason. It all fits together well and goes well with the summary; not too distracting, not too bland. Very well done!

I adore the characters. The sister dynamic words really well between the two of these women, and you've made a very realistic relationship. You've attached me to these girls in such a way that I'm excited to see them in other settings. I want to see them around the rest of their family or at school or something.

I love that the dreamcatcher in the story already, seriously. I dislike it when I read a whole story and then the last line is why the story's called what it's called. C'mon, people. You scrambled and had to fit the title in the end, obviously. I already know why your story is called what its called, so amazing.

Overall, this was excellent. You are super talented, keep up the great work!

I claim comment innocence! c:
I really enjoyed this and looking forward to more. <3
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