500 Days of Teenage Love - Comments

when i first saw the title come up as the story i needed to read in comment swap my mind jump straight to 500 days of summer (which i's watch only a few days ago). I think you should read through the story again there are just some slight mistakes where you type the wrong word or missed typing something, like here "Sure. Jay B. Get hear that desk." I assume you meant to right her? The way you write talking speech is a little different to everything I've read you uses a lot of full stops when you should be using commas. Your characters seem life like, the mix well together. I was a little confused with their unique ways of talking so often had to read things more then once to understand. But the story does look promising

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I've only read the first chapter, but in reading the summary I feel like this story is going to be extremely cliche. However, as you're not too far in, you could easily change that and make this story yours; throw a major plot twist in there. You don't need to exactly copy 500 Days of Summer. Play around with it and see what happens. Having said that, your characters are great. It seems like you spent some time really developing them, so kudos to you for that. I think you've got something wonderful going for you here (: Keep up the great work. xx

This is an interesting story. I like the concept behind it. There are a few little grammar things, but no huge errors that I noticed. Nothing that can't be fixed with a quick read-through. I like your characters and how they interact, and I like the song quotes before each chapter.

In the first part you have a small error "she has even texted" instead of hasn't/ has not. I love how each character in the dialog has their own clear way of speaking although at times it was a little confusing/hard to read it was a cool thing to do. Everyone seems to kind of fit into a very stereotypical group, like the jock no one questions and a new girl that gives the outsiders view and seems to change the way a person thinks. I'm not a big fan of love stories but you were aiming for 500 days of summer and you definitely hit the nail on making it have the same feel.

I like interesting.

Update Soon. :)