The Wind Blows - Comments

  • Katie Mosing

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    From the first chapter, I can see that you have a great writing style. Your prose made the chapter very easy to understand and made things flow so that reading it didn't feel like a chore. I like that you used the first chapter to give some insight into John and Anna's backstory. You can see from the flashback that they had a really deep connection, which makes it even more sad that they are no longer together. The moment of them telling each other they love each other was very sweet and felt very real. You do a great job of showing that John is hurting without making him seem overly emotional, which is something that I find difficult for male characters. Great job!
    January 15th, 2016 at 06:43pm
  • hangsang.

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    I do like the use of song lyrics to show what's going to happen or at least give the reader a little insight on the story and where it might head. I can't say that I got excited to read this, but I did have some curiosity.

    Chapter One:
    I love the way you describe things within the story. I felt like I was actually there in one way or another and I really appreciated that.

    I feel so bad for John, the poor thing. I got tears in my eyes reading this, which I give you props for because I usually read stories with an almost bored-looking expression, but you got emotion out of me and that's amazing.

    his eyes wondered back to the arrangement of fresh flowers, wondered should be wandered

    Reading about their past makes me so sad because you could see how happy they were and all of that was ripped away so easily.

    I really loved the first chapter. There was so much emotion and you can tell just how much John loved her. Ah, it hurt so much! Aside from the error I pointed out above, I didn't see anything else in terms of mistakes. Everything flowed really well. Great job!
    January 11th, 2016 at 12:14am
  • Michael Westen

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    Summary It's decent. Song lyrics can work well to give us an idea of what the story might be. Something to note is that you don't need to add a disclaimer that you don't own people, we know that.

    Chapter One This is a wonderful start and introduction. It's quite sad to read, and I have a feeling if I knew the character it would be down right depressing. I like how you incorporated the past into it as it really gave an impact and made the setting that much sadder. The details really gave us an insight as to how John is feeling.

    I wish you luck with the rest of this story. You're a really good writer.
    January 10th, 2016 at 06:19pm
  • xoxo_aj_xoxo

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    Yeah!!! You're back!!! I've really missed this story. It's definitely one of my favourites. I'm glad you're back. Can't wait to see what happens next.
    June 24th, 2015 at 02:41am
  • mmmxalright

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    I just read this entire series and I love it. I'm so captivated. I hope you keep it up!
    August 1st, 2014 at 04:10am
  • Lizzylhuffman

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    Great story!! Please continue writing!! :)
    July 15th, 2014 at 05:27am
  • useyourtelescope

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    Please please please continue updating! I dropped everything I was doing so I could read this, and seriously it's worth it. I absolutely adore it. I'm dying to know what happens next!
    July 9th, 2014 at 06:46am
  • xoxo_aj_xoxo

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    Definitely continue writing. One of my favourite stories on here. So glad you updated.
    July 9th, 2014 at 02:19am
  • thefifthjoint.

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    oh man i really love this story, so hopefully you come back soon!
    March 9th, 2014 at 05:28am
  • lovelyhope

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    I just want to know what happened with their family! Obviously something huge.
    September 20th, 2013 at 05:22am
  • xoxo_aj_xoxo

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    I am so in love with this story. You write so beautifully. Can't wait for more of this.
    September 17th, 2013 at 01:50am
  • Run.Away

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    Please post more :)
    July 18th, 2013 at 07:04am
  • Marilynnn96

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    Continue this story please

    - awesome writer
    July 17th, 2013 at 08:08am
  • daydreamz

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    I meant freaking
    June 23rd, 2013 at 02:56am
  • daydreamz

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    This was a really good breaking chapter. Omg.
    June 23rd, 2013 at 02:55am
  • collidewiththesky

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    it's been so long since i read this! but i absolutely love your writing so i was really happy when i got the email that you updated. i hope you choose to continue writing and please update soon! ☺
    June 21st, 2013 at 11:02pm
  • xoxo_aj_xoxo

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    I'm so glad you updated. I am such a fan of this story and I love these two together. Don't know what's gonna happen when they get home but I can't wait to find out.
    June 21st, 2013 at 05:30am
  • lovelyhope

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    I'm still interested! Please, please continue it!
    December 17th, 2012 at 01:47am
  • alyssabeach

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    YESSSSSS YOU UPDATED HAHA!
    December 15th, 2012 at 07:24am
  • cswsbeebs

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    This is so good! I can't wait for the next update.
    December 15th, 2012 at 05:55am