From the first chapter, I can see that you have a great writing style. Your prose made the chapter very easy to understand and made things flow so that reading it didn't feel like a chore. I like that you used the first chapter to give some insight into John and Anna's backstory. You can see from the flashback that they had a really deep connection, which makes it even more sad that they are no longer together. The moment of them telling each other they love each other was very sweet and felt very real. You do a great job of showing that John is hurting without making him seem overly emotional, which is something that I find difficult for male characters. Great job!
January 15th, 2016 at 06:43pm