Birdie - Comments

So even though, I've read all this I realize I haven't commented yet. I can tell you've definitely planned everything out with precision and clarity, and it's proving to work out fairly well. :) I don't have much to say other than I can't wait to read the next chapter.

Newest chapter is interesting. I'm wondering if Amastas(??) or the new guy is her 'fairy love interest' that you were referring to earlier. I caught a few spelling errors in this, and I feel like some parts you explain a little too much. Like you're trying too hard to be descriptive and it ends up sounding disjointed and stiff. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Ooo la la, this is a very captivating story. I love it! I'm not one for fantasy stories that involve faries and things like that but this is just so unique. The way you describe things is very good, I like these fairy creatures. This story is really great, I'm going to subscribe to it and I look forward to reading the next chapter.

The last half of the second chapter has a few double words and missing words in it. i'm only saying this because you mentioned that you wanted to know of any mistakes, it's nothing a quick read through won't be able to fix. :)

I can't wait for your next update. I want to know what is going to happen when she meets her uncle's apprentice. Your writing style is really great. I like how easy it is to image what is going on. I also like how I can almost feel like I am the main character and walking into a building and looking at the books then having a Fae usher me around. This is a really great story even though there are only two chapters as of now. I have a feeling this is going to turn into an even better story with time.

I really like the layout, it's super cute. I love the little bird cage picture too, I'm guessing it's going to have a lot to do with the story?

Keep up the good work!

Great update. Some of the modern terms mixed in with this seemingly old aged world just sounds so odd to me. I get that this is in the future but you make it feel like we're in some Kingdom and everyone is old aged, what with the slaves and the fanciness and the carriages . then you turn around and use terms such as high school and I'm just like whaaa? I noticed that there were quite a few spelling errors throughout this chapter, maybe go through and read to correct them? Any way, still definitely intrigued as to what's going to happen next.

This looks like a really interesting story!

The layout is absolutely gorgeous, and I really like that quote in the summary.
I love the summary - mechimals, teehee - and I'm very pleased that there will be a romance with an aggravating fairy boy. They're the best kind of romances ;)

Chapter One: That first line broke my heart. In fact, the whole first chapter broke my heart.
I did notice however that you slightly changed tense throughout the chapter - you start off with past, and slowly move into present - the carriage I sat in...; Something occurs to me....
Oh, the Fae/Fay are known! I do quite like that.
I really like this whole chapter - how everything seems to be in the past - carriages, slaves, etc - but it's actually in the distant future.
This is amazing so far and I cannot wait for more!

First off, I'd like to say that the layout is really pretty. Also, I think the name Skye is lovely, too :)

I like the details and I like how Skye is very friendly with Jackson and really wants to be friends with Tinsley. I think I'm going to enjoy her character. The plot looks pretty well-thought out and I wish you good luck! :)

Well, I've definitely already read this before. Are you re-writing it? I didn't notice any differences from the last time I read it but I still enjoy it. The layout you've changed it to is beautiful and I noticed a few spelling errors here and there, but nothing that can't be fixed with a quick read through. Skye is an interesting character to me. I get that she was raised believing that women only understand certain things given the fact that she doesn't see 'the beauty in the invention because she's a young woman'. It was strange to me, given that you've made it clear this isn't in the past and yet they live like it is. That's also interesting to me. I also get the feeling that Skye is a little..uppity, if that's the right word? Obviously, she's not cruel since she was friendly with Jackson and wants to be with Tinsley but the fact that she so willingly says "But I'm smart..." makes me feel that she has a sense of superiority. Any way, I'm still interested and can't wait for the next update. :)

I love the layout, it's very beautiful, the story so far is well written, I love your description and how she believes she will never be normal again, good work. :)