This is good. Very interesting take on a night with a killer or sadist or whatever is going to happen to her. I would just like to point a few things out.
"Where the fuck are you going?!" The "?!" is not an actual grammatically acceptable way to end a sentence. When I saw that, I cringed because your writing is so good and then you killed it with that.
Also, "The metallic smell of blood suddenly because distinct to her." Because should be became. But honestly, other than those two things, your story was really good and I wish I knew exactly what happened to Julie.
Wow. I love the layout, firstly. I love how you wrote this, even though it is such a short piece. I would absolutely love for you to turn this first part into a prologue, then maybe base a short story off of it. Great! xo
"Where the fuck are you going?!" The "?!" is not an actual grammatically acceptable way to end a sentence. When I saw that, I cringed because your writing is so good and then you killed it with that.
Also, "The metallic smell of blood suddenly because distinct to her." Because should be became. But honestly, other than those two things, your story was really good and I wish I knew exactly what happened to Julie.