November 21st, 2012 at 10:05pm
For the magazine contest.
I enjoyed the way you told this as though it were a story to a loved one that had been lost, and I think there are a lot of people that could relate to that. It was very obvious that you were passionate about this piece from the beginning, and even though it was short, you put a lot of emotion into it.
You only use 'I' and 'you', never giving us a gender of either one so this can apply to anyone who reads it and can relate to the situation. A lost potential love, through nothing else other than their own reluctance to tell the truth of their feelings. So many people can relate to this. The emotion that I can feel beneath the words makes it relate-able, understandable, like someone who has never experienced this before can feel it almost as if they're experiencing it themselves. This was lovely.