The Bucket List - Comments

Oh my goodness. I just read the introduction and first chapter. I’m not going to lie. The first chapter made me teary eyed. I feel like this hasn’t happened in a while. But then again I have not been reading like I used to. Part of me felt getting pulled into the story and feeling the emotions. To be honest with you, that hasn’t happened for a while. I am excited to see were this story goes. I’m not going to lie, I don’t know much about who this is about but I will defiantly keep reading. I’m hooked! I also just saw that you have completed this story so I’m excited to get into this story and see what else happens. As I was reading the bucket list, I realized something. I’ve never wrote an actual list but I found myself checking things off. I liked that whole idea, I feel like it made me connect with the character and what they are trying to accomplish in a time were time seems limited. The characters are well developed and I just really felt the emotions of the characters. I enjoyed finding this fandom and look forward to reading the rest. I don’t see any major issues with what you wrote so far.

@ BuckytheDucky thank you for the comment. I hope you enjoy it!

I've only read the first chapter, but my heart is already breaking! You've put so much emotion into your words, the description of Russ finally crying and her family begging her to keep fighting, the way she just...doesn't want to any more... ugh. I'll be back tomorrow to read more!!!

I love how you mentioned, right of the bat, the cancer situation. Especially the part where Grace talks about sacrificing herself for the sake of her family even though she wants to live. That just seems, to me, like something that sets stories with cancer involved apart and also catches a readers attention right away.

Also, I like that even though this is apparently a fanfic it focuses more on the main characters life rather than relying on the famous persons presence, you know? Good job so far : )

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I know nothing about this fandom, which actually made it better since I got to focus solely on your writing. I like that you develop your characters, although I feel like you did it too fast by just describing them in the beginning, instead of just doing it over time. I do love your style of writing though!

I was brought here by the Comment Swap.
Ok, so, I've only read the first three chapters, but, I have some things to say.
First off, I like that you have an actual bucket list. It adds to the affect, and tells you a bit about the main character. So that's good.
Secondly, Comment Swap gives you NO information about the suggestions. But, I could tell early on that this was a fan-fic. Which is cool. I started in fan-fic. But, I also noticed pretty early on that you have some errors that are consistent throughout your writing. I won't list them all, here, but feel free to ask me about them, and I will gladly provide any help or advice that you may seek.
Finally, I think your story is going somewhere good, and I think that you have real talent. I hope you continue writing, and I hope that your talents continue to grow.
Also, I'm curious about Eric, so I guess I'll have to keep reading.

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I had no idea who this was about and had to Google it, haha. Maybe because of that I had a hard time getting into it, and it had nothing to do with how it was written. I really like your writing style and think your characters are very well-developed. I especially liked the part when Pat paraded her in front of the other boys. Made me laugh.

I noticed a couple times that you had 'I' instead of she and your sentences did ramble on a bit. There's nothing wrong with taking a breather and adding a few extra periods.

All in all, I enjoyed this. Keep on writing.

ohmygod i'm sobbing the end though :( I was hoping she wouldn't die but I knew it was coming. This was just perfect and thank you for writing it.

From the comment swap.
This is really good! Your write your characters beautifully as well as their emotions. I'm not familiar with this fandom, but that didn't matter.
Keep up the good work!

I'm not familiar with the fandom either, so it confused me in the beginning. However, I like what I read so far. I feel a connection with the characters, which is unusual for me. There were a couple of grammatical errors here in there, but that didn't really matter to me. I still think everything so far is beautifully written. A quick suggestion though: The layout text is all distorted for me. I'm not sure how it is for you. You might wanna take another look at it when you get the time. :o

I am also unfamiliar with this fandom but to be honest that didn't matter. I connected with the characters and it was one of those rare story's where I actually felt a connection with the characters and cared about them. You are brilllient at writing about the emotions and you definitely should't stop writing!

I've just started reading this finished the first chapter [via comment swap], and though I'm not familiar with the fandom, I really like what I've read so far. Just a question, was this orignally written in first person because I've noticed first person pronouns being slipped in random places.

Eg in the first chapter

"Russ didn’t say anything, his eyes were red raw and he couldn’t look her in the eye; instead he looked over my shoulder biting his lip" [The 'my']

Or is there another character that is yet to be introduced?

I love how the first chapter sets up the story, and I can really feel the emotions especially Russ' pain.

The final phrase at the end of the chapter made my heart hurt. Beautiful. I will definitely keep reading.

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Aww what a beautiful story. Didn't expect it to end that way, I was hoping Grace would have so much more time with Garrett :( her letter to him broke my heart and I always have a hard time getting through those last moments, it's so unfortunate. But I enjoyed how it was written and overall it was a nice read. I admit I don't think I'm aware of which fandom this would go under, but it wasn't too hard to follow :) emotional, lovely job. Bucket lists are so inspiring.

ohmygod. SO MANY TEARS. this was insanely well written. and gosh. </3

@ Shorty
Thank you for your comment, I really appreciate it :D

I've only made it a few chapters in, but I am very impressed so far. The first chapter had a very nice tone, and I was able to feel what the characters were feeling. I enjoyed your writing, it was free of errors and very descriptive. I also think the story idea is original, which I always applaud, good story or bad.

Overall, well done.

I'm really sad that it ended this way. I've been reduced to tears. This was an amazing story.

Back again from Comment Swap for a very,very ood reason but oh well I guess.You have updated alot since I was last lurking around here.I still don't know who this is,like I said before I don't branch out alot.I personally like the story and the idea of a bucket list story.Some of the things on the bucket list are things I want to do as well so that made me interested in the story when I was first sent here by Comment Swap :)

This is such a cute story, Garrett is such a cutie in this! I wish this was the real reason behind his heart tattoo because then he might not have covered them up...

When I read this it makes me feeling you're writing this because you feel you -have- to. Less because you actually want to. You don't seem to enjoy this story at all. Before we have a chance to like your main character, you've broken her down and put her at her worst. It makes me fear everything about this story, from here on out, is going to be about how sad she is. I understand that this is a story about a girl dying, but from the summary I'm to understand it's also a romance. There ought to be a bright glimmer of light somewhere. Some spark of hope and happiness. Otherwise, as I read, I'll just get sadder...and sadder...until I'm met with the sad ending. If you're hoping for some relief from emotion, the least you can do is paint a picture of happier times. Let us know who the main character was, at her best, before we read an entire story about her at her worst.