-Comment Swap- Not sure who this guy eyes. The concept is nice enough. Although, I don't branch out much when it comes to fan fictions. I do like knowing who I am reading about. Good luck though. (Sorry, I guess I didn't write enough for the last comment. Feel free to delete it.) Also, I'd like to add that it's a nice enough layout, but white on any color is generally quite hard to read as well as a dark shade of blue on light blue. Once again, good luck, and sorry about this second comment. xD
-Comment Swap- Not sure who this guy eyes. The concept is nice enough. Although, I don't branch out much when it comes to fan fictions. I do like knowing who I am reading about. Good luck though.
-Comment Swap- I don't know who this is,sorry.I don't branch out alot so I know very little bands and such.I don't even know if he is in a band so uhm yeah.Antiways,I liked the summary,it draws you in.The title does too:) But the layout is simple yet nice.And yeah,good writing
The summery drew me in and the who having a list to do before before you die is amazing. It was a very likeable story despite the few spelling and grammatical errors. I do wish there was a bit more metaphorical writing as well you have a great sense of story telling and it was not a bad story all in all :)
Well I must say that the idea of a bucket list really makes me excited. I read the first couple of chapter (I think I got to chapter 5 or 6) and I enjoyed it. You have great development of characters and ever though I have no idea who Garret Nickelsen is, it was a pleasure to read. You make the story likeable to everyone. You do have a couple spelling/grammar mistakes and if you would like me to, I would gladly point them out. Just send me a message or something. Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story and I am definitely recommending.
This is for comment swap as well. Which is also the reason why I only read the first two chapters, and then a part of the 19th (I think) chapter. The summary drew me in because I adored the idea of having a list of things to do before one dies, and being forced to do so very quickly. That was a great thought, great beginning. But I have to admit that I didn't feel very drawn by the story itself. Maybe it's because I don't know if the characters are famous or yours, and I cannot associate with them very much. Another reason is that I didn't find your style too great - for me, that is. I like descriptions more, metaphoric writing; you described the actions a lot and I found your sentences a little dragging. Also I was bothered by the mistakes (especially the lack of commas at places). I think this story has a lot of potential, but there are things that could be improved. You have a good sense of story-telling, this just wasn't exactly my cup of tea.
Comment swap. I have no idea who Garret Nickelsen is, I'm sorry!
But anyway, the story. I only read the first two chapters. It has nothing to do with your idea for this story though, don't worry about that. From the summary it actually sounds really interesting! The idea of a bucket list is a wonderful thing to write about.
About your writing style. Style wise you have a wonderful thing going on. Your descriptiveness is great and you have a good flow going on. Grammar wise you should pay more attention to there/there, hear/here and where you add comas. Also there's a few times where you switch words (I instead of she, mouth instead of hand in chapter two). But if you work on that a little bit more (maybe have someone proofread before you post), I'm sure this will be a wonderful story.
Okay, so I was barely a paragraph into the story when I realized that you have this natural talent with story telling. Cancer is one of those subjects that is hard to write and pull off well but you did it flawlessly. I admire writers who can do that.
I don't know who Garrett Nickelsen is either but I'm willing to read to this story regardless. You describe the scenes perfectly with this warm feeling, like, I don't know how to describe it. It just makes me feel like I'm experiencing the situations too. I like stories that are written realistically. Good job. :)
So, I'm only a few chapters in but, hm, here it goes:
First off, I have absolutely no idea who Garrett Nickelsen is o.o I confess I only tried this comment swap thing because I was bored out of my mind, but I'm not here to say whether I know that guy or not. Don't be offended I don't (: He's pretty cute, though :D
As for your writing, you sometimes write 'I' instead of 'she' or 'he', but it happened maybe twice. It's not a big deal. You should use more comas, but your writing is beautiful. I really love the way you describe things and how everything flows naturally. Everything about this story is so... I don't even know. It feels beautifully real. I admire that (:
As for the story itself, I'm having a little trouble reading it, but it's not your fault, don't worry. Cancer is just a touchy subject to me and yeah... I read the story summary and was already crying :' It’s just that I know what is like to lose someone that way. But I promise I’ll do my best to read the rest of the story, because you really deserve that credit. Six chapters in and I already say this is a beautiful story :’)
(OMG, this comment is huge O.O are you bored already?)
Love, love, love, love, love it! (: The layout is adorable and the picture is even more adorable. Your writing is very detailed and very intriguing, and it's definitely got me hooked. Right after I finish this comment, I have to hit the recommend and subscribe button because i'm not leaving this story before I do. I have to thank comment swap for taking me here... and i'm glad it did :) I'm officially hooked. Love it!!!!
I love how just.. I love this story. The Maine is absolutely my favorite band and just, Garrett is someone I'm quite fond of. I like how everything happens slowly. Like, you just don't tell everyone all at once about the cancer.
I just, I don't like it when story's are rushed out like that. This one on the otherhand, this one is close to being my favorite. I love how realistic the emotions are. The lack of errors in the grammar department. Everything down to Halvo first talking to her.
I adore the closeness her and Russ share, it makes me wish for an older brother. This story just.. I love it.
Wow. I'm only one chapter in but I honestly want to start crying. I hate cancer and death, they both freak me out and terrify the hell out of me.
I'm glad there's a banner so I know who I'm reading about. I love Garrett. He's so adorable and I'm really looking forward to continuing through and finding out what role he has. Russ, poor thing. I feel so sorry for him. It's terrible to watch someone you love die and not be able to do anything about it. Grace is a strong character and I really like that.
As for the writing itself, you had a few slipups in person, saying I instead of she, but just a few. I reccommend a few commas here and there. They make things easier to read and they make them really flow. Otherwise, your writing is really good. I'm really into this story! :)
I absolutely love this story.The entire idea and storyline just blew me away.Cancer is a really scary thing and I've lost a few family and friends to it, but this story seems to bring up a lighter side, showing that you can still complete and do everything you want to do.I really love this story a lot and the characters as well.Your a brilliant writer :)
I really like this story. Cancer is a really hard thing to write about, but you've managed to make the main character relatable despite her illness. I think your plotline is great and this story is shaping up to be a real good one. I like your writing style too, you're descriptive without being over-the-top.
The only criticism I have about the whole thing would be your grammar; especially when you're using 'too' and 'to' or 'their', 'they're' and 'there'. Make sure you use the right one. Other than that though, I really like this! Keep on going!
Comment Swap keeps bringing me to fandoms which I know nothing about. I'm not sure who Garrett Nickleson is or why hes got Fan Fiction but the guy in the banner is pretty cute nonetheless. I didn't read the entire thing, only the first few chapters but hun you write beautifully. And even though your main character Grace has cancer, you've still made her relatable.
The first chapter reminded me heavily of the song Cancer by My Chemical Romance and i was wondering if it helped influence you to write this?
I did notice your point of view fluctuating a bit, between third and first person in the chapters I read. But they're easily spotted and shouldn't be that hard to fix.
Comment swap gave this to me again? Sooo I'll thank you for the comment on my Cap story, remind you that I love this story and jhgjfbndsjdhfjnbdfjbcxhdfkakwbdufbhjhfbxdhskkibgffjdsijxndbfbfjdkdeihgfbgnfksdfdjgbfufdfhfufdhyrehdbcxdhffdhfhfdjsdjhfjhfjdushdhf. Ok. Sorry. I really do love this story. I subbed :)
I really liked the summary. It was actually quite captivating! I've never read any The Maine-central fics, and I usually stay away from main characters who have cancer because those fics tend to get a little desperate and I simply can't relate. But this. This is something else. It has an overall feeling of inspiration and is uplifting. Something I really didn't expect!
The main point of critisicm I have to say to you is watch your grammar. You're missing some punctuation and adding unecessary colons where you could simply break sentences in two. Other than that, fantastic job! :)
I love the part where they all thought Russ was her boyfriend, it was truly brilliant. Okay, to start off, this story line is truly beautiful. I've had cancer in my family, and I've watched people do bucket lists because of the cancer, so this is just reminding me how beautiful those memories are and how they can be. I'm hoping she wins over the cancer, that's a huge hope. Also, I love how Pat introduced himself at the start, it made me chuckle. You write so beautifully, I'm seriously jealous. I've hardly noticed any grammar errors. And the plot is so original, I haven't seen something like this before. You're doing a brilliant job and I can't wait for the update.