Revenge - Comments

Camcas555 (100)

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@ This.Is.Me.
Thanks

I like starting stories off like that

October 22nd, 2012 at 06:04am

This.Is.Me. (100)

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Very confusing at first. I didn't understand what was happening, but I thought the begining was effective: because you wanted to know why she was crying. And it made you think of different things eg. Sex, drugs etc... Hard to read though, space out the talking. But very good story line so far. Keep writing!!!:)

June 27th, 2012 at 06:22pm

i'm a happy camper. (100)

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I didn't get the last part of chapter one? Or maybe I'm just stupid or something.
There were A LOT of spelling and grammar mistakes and I recommend you get a beta reader to look over your work and make sure your story's focused and clear. The layout was hard on my eyes and the hotpink lettering didn't help either.
Sorry to be so negative, but I'm just trying to give feedback that might help you. Don't get discouraged and keep writing.

June 20th, 2012 at 09:43pm