the pieces in the trash to try and forget about. - I think it sounds like the end of this sentence is missing: about it or about him.
The anchorwoman whose never - had? Tense seems out in this sentence.
This was quite neat and clever. :) I like that there was speculation on the narrator's behalf about the clarity of the photograph and how she could have sworn there was some movement. But then she kind of shrugged it off a little bit. And I like how you describe it so that there could actually be something there and when she's broken up with and going on a mad mission, it becomes clearer what that photograph might do. It was a nice twist(?) to it all, well-written too.
And in your summary you said something about never writing in from a female perspective...well, it was good. :) At times, like the first line of the story, there was no doubt that it was written in a female perspective. So there's nothing to worry about there. :)
But most of all, I like how the majority of this was narrative rather than dialogue. :)
The anchorwoman whose never - had? Tense seems out in this sentence.
This was quite neat and clever. :) I like that there was speculation on the narrator's behalf about the clarity of the photograph and how she could have sworn there was some movement. But then she kind of shrugged it off a little bit. And I like how you describe it so that there could actually be something there and when she's broken up with and going on a mad mission, it becomes clearer what that photograph might do. It was a nice twist(?) to it all, well-written too.
And in your summary you said something about never writing in from a female perspective...well, it was good. :) At times, like the first line of the story, there was no doubt that it was written in a female perspective. So there's nothing to worry about there. :)
But most of all, I like how the majority of this was narrative rather than dialogue. :)