You should fix as many mistakes as you can before posting things to Mibba. Even if this is your first story, you should proofread or get someone else to do it for you.
You need a title first. Even if you don't have a title for it yet, I feel like you should capitalize it, just to make it look more professional.
You should put the chapter description as the summary instead. It seems to be describing the whole story rather than the chapter itself.
"Hey fatso ive always wounderd what a fat persons life is like imean is it fun basically living in the kitchen!" That should be "Hey fatso, I've also wondered what a fat person's life is like. I mean, is it fun basically living in the kitchen?"
"I bet you cant even see your feet cause of how fat you are" That should be I bet you can't even see your feet 'cause of how fat you are."
"Do you share clothes with your mommy!i bet shes as fat as you!"Do you share clothes with your mommy? I bet she's as fat as you!
I cant forget about all the insults they told me back then.if i was as tough as i am now i wouldnt have let them make fun of me.i would have said something back.but i didnt .why?because i was such coward i couldnt stand up for myself cause i was always scared.but now im a whole didfrent person they wont even recognize me. This whole thing has many mistakes in it. I can't forget about all the insults they told me back then. If I was as tough as I am now, I wouldn't have let them make fun of me. I would have said something back. But I didn't. Why? Because I was such a coward. I couldn't stand up for myself 'cause I was always scared. But not I'm a whole different person. They won't even recognize me.
Honestly, I couldn't enjoy this because of all the mistakes in it. I don't know enough about the idea of the story either. I really suggest getting someone else to read this and help you edit it, and I think using a spellchecker would really help. Best of luck to you.
You need a title first. Even if you don't have a title for it yet, I feel like you should capitalize it, just to make it look more professional.
You should put the chapter description as the summary instead. It seems to be describing the whole story rather than the chapter itself.
"Hey fatso ive always wounderd what a fat persons life is like imean is it fun basically living in the kitchen!"
That should be "Hey fatso, I've also wondered what a fat person's life is like. I mean, is it fun basically living in the kitchen?"
"I bet you cant even see your feet cause of how fat you are" That should be I bet you can't even see your feet 'cause of how fat you are."
"Do you share clothes with your mommy!i bet shes as fat as you!" Do you share clothes with your mommy? I bet she's as fat as you!
I cant forget about all the insults they told me back then.if i was as tough as i am now i wouldnt have let them make fun of me.i would have said something back.but i didnt .why?because i was such coward i couldnt stand up for myself cause i was always scared.but now im a whole didfrent person they wont even recognize me. This whole thing has many mistakes in it. I can't forget about all the insults they told me back then. If I was as tough as I am now, I wouldn't have let them make fun of me. I would have said something back. But I didn't. Why? Because I was such a coward. I couldn't stand up for myself 'cause I was always scared. But not I'm a whole different person. They won't even recognize me.
Honestly, I couldn't enjoy this because of all the mistakes in it. I don't know enough about the idea of the story either. I really suggest getting someone else to read this and help you edit it, and I think using a spellchecker would really help. Best of luck to you.