Sapiunt - Comments

Your such a good writer something as simple as this chapter pulls me in, makes me want more. Don't waste you beautiful talent! Keep writing.

I'm interested and I'm surprised your story doesn't have more comments. It's really wonderfully written and the plot is beyond intriguing. You had me from the summary sentences.
I did notice a grammer issue in the third sentence of your story. I don't think "Their" isn't the "there" word you were looking for. I think you meant "they're".
Anyway, I love where the story is going and can't wait for you to update :)

First of all, let me say I really love the way you write. It's beautiful while being easy to understand. Also, I really like the layout. It's pretty, but simple. Allowing me to focus more on reading.

From what I've read, this story has me intrigued. I like how you've started this story out; seemingly in the middle of something. It leaves me guessing what happened before all of this started and what will happen in the future. I love reading stories that keep me guessing, like this one. That requires much talent. I really hope you're able to keep that up because I love a little mystery. :)

Anyway, the only problem I noticed was the use of "Their" in the first real paragraph of the chapter. It should be they're. Super easy fix and something I often mistake as well. xD Other than that, I think it's brilliant and I will be subscribing/anxiously awaiting to see what comes next! Great work.

well, yea...first of, im very honest...and im honestly saying this story has me intrigued.....so write more? please? ^_^