March 31st, 2012 at 04:42pm
Firstly, thanks for entering the contest. Secondly, they sell maternity shirts at Hollister or did I read that wrong? lol.
Anyways, this is super cute. I love the little background info you give and than the ending. Oh boy, the ending is my favorite. I think that's a big part of why I love these types of stories! Thanks again for entering and being the first with an entry!
As far as grammar goes, when you want to add dialogue with a little tid bit that isn't a part of the dialogue, you should use this format. "Hello, Sarah," she said. Or We were talking on the front porch and he said, "I love you." Instead of using a period, use a comma. Otherwise, I think you hit the grammar pretty well.
It was definately creative, like my first post said. I loved the overall idea of the story.
Your spelling was great, didn't notice anything wrong there.
You obviously related it to all the rules! YAY!
I also gave you some extra points for being somewhat emotional, it could've been a little more but you still got points; being descriptive, again, could've been a little more descriptive; having a layout that wasn't the default!; and relating back to the overall theme of the contest.
You received 83 out of 60 points from myself. When I get the other judges totals, I will post them to you here or in a message! Thanks so much for joining and participating in the We're Having a Baby Contest!