Sticks and Stones and Rising Voices - Comments

I was told to read this and I am honestly glad I did. It took me until a little over halfway through to realize you were writing the story backwards, until the end of course. You're writing of this story is utterly superb. You definitely got a recommendation out of me.

This is all kinds of beautiful.
Amazing job.

I just read this in passing. I've meant for a long time to read it, as I've actually seen this around the site a lot. But this is the first time I've actually taken the plunge and I am so glad I did! Your style is beautiful, it truly is. There is such pain and your characterisation is completely on point. I'm going to be very incoherent here, but the feelings. Seriously, they're overwhelming. The way you've structured the narrative is unusual - unexpected. Most would leave the news that a character is sick to nearer the end, but I always read books backwards anyway. Knowing that Ewan is unwell early on only makes me feel Ione's pain more keenly, and it tinges everything I read with a little bit of sadness but it also makes me grasp onto their happiness all the more tightly.

Honestly, I am not sure if this is finished. I feel like it could well be, and of it were, I would not be disappointed. But I have my heart in my throat right now and your writing is simply so entrancing that I'm going to subscribe in the hopes for more.

I've caught myself up on all of the chapters so far. I absolutely love this, without a doubt! Firstly, I love your layout. It's simple and pretty and it doesn't distract you from the writing at all.

I think you have such talent in description; it's truly remarkable. The writing is so beautiful, it almost reads like poetry. I only wish the chapters were a little longer, though it's absolutely not necessary. The shortness of them makes me very eager to read more and more. So I suppose it's a good thing they're short; it keeps readers hungry for more.

He read of men fighting, seeing himself in their personification. He encouraged the musk of the vintage page with every twist and turn. He read of the blood lost and the love gained. He read of people he would never meet and places he would never see. Ewan ran his hand over Ione's skin once more.
This paragraph had me nearly speechless. All the reasons why, I'm not entirely sure. All I know is that it was really beautiful. The way you described how completely engulfed in that book was brilliant.

As for anything I noticed that could be changed, I just think a few sentences out of the lot could be rearranged to sound more fluid. For example, "He had missed the entire movie almost." In my opinion, I think that sentence would flow more smoothly if you put 'almost' earlier on in the sentence. Like "He had almost missed the entire movie." Other than that, I couldn't find anything else wrong with this piece. It seems you are a far more superior writer than myself. :D

Overall, I love this. And I'm subscribing. I love the contrasts in their relationship. At times, it's really vitriolic. At others, it's very passionate. Something about that is really entrancing. And absolutely mysterious. So, keep up the good work! I can't wait to read more and I'll definitely suggest this to others! Sorry for the super long comment! It seems I've been giving everyone really long comments lately. xD