August 5th, 2012 at 07:09pm
Why doesn't thing have any comments?
I was on the edge of my seat the whole time I was reading this, eager to get to the last step, to see what was going to happen. And the whole time I just wanted to cry, knowing that something bad was going to happen. But in the end, everything seemed to turn out okay.
I love how you left so much to the imagination, too. You didn't show her and Johnny getting together, confessing their love for each other. That's overdone. You just had them getting into the car, and I absolutely loved that. =) Nicely done!
xoxo
HJ.
When I first clicked on the story, I was a little nervous that perhaps, it would be a really dramatic slash story. But I was so wrong! It was really good! I really liked that you did it in segments - it made it flow very nicely and it was cool that you had it counting backwards for the steps she needed to take to reach for the door and shed some light on the truth. Like every memory of what happened was a step. I don't know, I thought that was really clever.
I agree with Haylie Jaed. This should have more comments then it does! I'm really glad that it popped up on the comment swap thing, or I never would have found it!
In my mind, I like to think that her and Johnny get together and have a good life together and she forgets all about Brian. I also like to think that Lisa breaks up with Brian and totally crushes him because let's be honest, he deserves it. He was such a jerk to her when she broke up with him, and he had no right. He cheated on her! She had every right to be mean to him and he had no right to react the way he did.
Anyway, I thought this was a nice read. (: