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  • Manbear-n'-Me!

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    Here for comment swap. =)

    I...read through this whole thing. And my goodness...this is amazing. O_O Even the stark white layout here, it just works and complements the story.

    Each chapter was simple, calm and just beautiful... and these short parts were so artistically written and...gah, I just loved it!
    Your style of writing here is beautiful; I literally couldn't turn away from this story.

    I usually like to be constructive, but I really don't have anything negative to say...thank you for writing such a beautiful piece!
    February 23rd, 2013 at 12:06am
  • creeps

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    this is really beautiful, i seriously cannot even being to explain how lovely and wonderful this is i'm only on chapter six and it makes me feel good inside and aw i'm just rambling but you have a wonderful style of writing i cannot wait to keep reading and i'm going to check out your other pieces on here (i'm sorry for my lack of punctuation and capitalization it happens when i'm emotional) xoxox
    July 28th, 2012 at 06:52pm
  • boyking

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    "I remember it differently," She says, and I feel a fissure forming and cracking apart my ribcage. FUCK

    this is beautiful and you're lucky i'm sparing you from me quoting something different from every chapter that i found interesting or unique or an example of perfect writing because thinking about it more i'd probably end up quoting this entire story. i'm not sure why i've never read it before considering it's by you and everything you do is beyond brilliant, but this was great and i enjoyed it! i cant wait to start the sequel
    July 13th, 2012 at 03:30am
  • Vampirelover31

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    I love this story... It's really good
    July 4th, 2012 at 06:20pm
  • n0rthlaner

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    THIS IS AMAZING OMG
    June 20th, 2012 at 01:15am
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    The second chapter is even better and i love the words that are chosen and it almost broke my heart at the thought that the place where she lives can be considered home when most wont something more but i'm rambling and honestly you have a great story here!!!!!
    your a great writer and i'm looking forward to reading the rest!!!
    June 16th, 2012 at 04:10am
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    The second chapter is even better and i love the words that are chosen and it almost broke my heart at the thought that the place where she lives can be considered home when most wont something more but i'm rambling and honestly you have a great story here!!!!!
    your a great writer and i'm looking forward to reading the rest!!!
    June 16th, 2012 at 04:10am
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    wow, you a re a really good right to say something so deep in just a few words. very descriptive and left me wanting to read more!!
    June 16th, 2012 at 04:02am
  • tigermilk

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    oh god this chapter broke my heart, I'm feeling all tremulous and anxious YOU'RE AMAZING OKAY I'm sorry for not being more eloquent but I love you and your writing lots <33333333
    June 15th, 2012 at 03:13pm
  • Roden.

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    Ugh, this first chapter is amazing. Even though it's short, it reads like a poem; a lovely, emotional poem :)

    I'm going to subscribe to this, and I'm also wondering if it's over or not, but I guess I'll find out if I get an email about any update.

    Excellent start.
    June 14th, 2012 at 11:31pm
  • tigermilk

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    LISA your writing leaves me pretty much breathless, you are so utterly perfect I just..... ugh you're amazing!!!
    June 14th, 2012 at 04:45pm
  • Sansa Stark

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    As the comments below point out, your chapters, although very short, are filled with emotion. I'm not used to reading stories this short but this one is definitely pretty good. I feel that each chapter lifts up the veil just a tiny bit more, keeping the mystery. Well done!
    June 13th, 2012 at 10:50pm
  • Tyrone_Swift

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    I'm curious if this story is over? Its really, truly beautiful. The chapters are short, which I usually hate, but THIS IS HOW A SHORT CHAPTER SHOULD BE! Its like poetry to me, and if this story is done, I feel as though it ends perfectly. Very well done.
    June 7th, 2012 at 07:00am
  • aubs

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    This is a really excellent story. My favorite part of this story would have to be the length of each chapter -- they are short but pack in so much emotion, action and description into them that it's amazing. And I also love how each chapter kind of gives away something else about the girl and how the main character feels about her. I actually think it’s a cute relationship that the two have even though not much is really said about it. I also really like the two characters because, just like they’re relationship, not much is given about them. I just think that this is a cute and amazing story.
    June 5th, 2012 at 06:24am