A Mouse's Tale - Comments

Lol, I came up with this on the comment swap again. Like I said before, it's a lovely story and I enjoyed reading it. It's not really something I would usually read, but the story is cute. I think the name Mouse is kinda strange though lol. cute but strange. I bothers me a bit lol. But that's okay.

I just came up across this and continued reading very lovely, I like what you did with the story.

I really like how Mouse and Queen Arya interact though at times it seems forced. I like the tone in which you have written it's easy to read. You use just the right about of description but not to much that readers lose the point of what is actually happening. I have subscribe and plan to read the rest of the chapters (i only read the first 4).

@ Annabelle Graceton
really?! That's be great if you can!

@ discoveringclouds
When I had written it, it was never intended to be seen as nasty. And they didn't "do" anything. Mouse's uniform has two shirts. I never said that both were off :-p
And I will for sure :) Thank you for believing in me :)

Contrary to pretend popular belief I like it. Although their..relationship got a little nasty and didn't flow well with the olden time feel. I really liked it. Also I'm very interested in the book. When it comes out direct me to theright bookstore.

@ storyluver1143
it unfortunately is not, as the companion is Vyron's story, but I may be willing to send you a piece from my main novel that starts to explain all of that :)

what?! i want to know about her spy parents!!!! or will it be in the sequel/companion novel? ^.^ thanks for writing this storyyy!!! :)

@ NothinNNomore
that is something that is explained further in my main novel. Mouse found out that her real name was Annabelle and that she was the daughter of Jonathin and Elizabeth Graceton, who were the cocreators of a spy network in Keiento. They were killed one night after leaving their one year old child with an elderly woman name Hilda Lemon-Bun for safekeeping.
Roran is a current member of this spy network, and the son of the other cocreator of the spynetwork, Rogan Greystone. Now Mouse and Roran are the coleaders of this organization and they both have started to develop feelings for each other. But again, this is all stuff that is explained further in my main novel, which, once I finish writing, I will hopefully someday publish.

I hope that helped explain things a bit. If you have any more questions, don't hesitate to ask :)

So I'm kind of confused as to what happened at the end. Like, the whole Annabel thing.

No worries, there are many possibilities and I look forward to what happens.

@ discoveringclouds
all I'm going to say for now is don't jump to conclusions :-p

@ fearless-forever
the world of Antaiya is set in its own little world. It doesn't stick to the rules or timelines of our world :-p so yes, it has a medieval kind of feel to it, but their speech does not have to match that :-p I hope that made sense

I just found this and I love it so much!! The storyline is great, and I love the characters, especially mouse.
There were a few things that were confusing like how they talked, because I assume they aren't supposed to be in modern times, though some of the words and phrases sounded ahead of this time if you catch my drift.
But I loved everything else about it, can't wait for the last chapter!!!

Oh the Irony...they are doing something so profane in public and then they talk about the sacred beliefs that they share and The Creator. It's hypocritical.

Marriage might just save 'em.

I look forward to the end though still, I want to know about Mouse's family. If you described them with cat-like descriptions or reflexes that would be funny, I would also worry for her safety with them though!

Aw mouse! She's always thinking many step ahead of everyone else! I hope she gets to marry Vyron!

This is a decent story. I will admit I only came across it because of the comment swap thing, but the story isn't too bad. It's different from what I might usually read but still alright. :]

It sucks that he still has to leave, but it's good that he wasn't de-knighted or however you'd say it.

Aww no! Well their relationship and marriage was unclear. Now im confused! Also the queens language should be more mature. I'm sad they won't be together but interested in how mouses life will continue. The effect of the past...is it coming? That's what I wonder. Keep writing!

WHATTTT????? Is he being stupid and avoiding her because he got stripped of his title? I know that it's a big deal, but if he frekaing blames her and leaves her I will murder him.

oh no! poor vyron D: I hope he can find something else that he will love! keep on writing more! :D