Like The Brightest Star, You Shine Through - Comments

You have to make a contimuation with this i just i need it

YOU CAN'T END IT THERE! Please make a sequel or epilogue of something. I really wanna know what Ronnie thinks when Max tells him the truth.

Please continue.I want to know Ronnie's reaction to Max's secret.

Please continue the story? Please?

plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz do more of this story i rly rly rly rly wanna know what Ronnie thinks when Max tells himmmmm :'(

Squeeeeeee! <3 Update soon please!

Chapter Three

And now we come to the beginning of Max and Ronnie hanging out, and all I was doing in the whole chapter was trying to watch Ronnie's character and make sure he doesn't try to make a move on her from the very beginning. What I really appreciate is the way Max responded to the music comment, and Ronnie seemed to really respect her for that. I like it when a man can respect his woman, and that seems to be what Ronnie is doing.

Yet again, you gotta love the way Max sees the world, and I know I do. Her view is unique and different, and why shouldn't it be when she's on the outside of the world, looking in? The thought that Ronnie might tell her secret horrifies me in a way I will never be able to express in words. Hopefully, by the time he finds out about her, he'll already like her and be okay with her, and he'll understand that he cares for her as a friend and shouldn't hurt her.

I like how he took her to McDonald's after the lovely lactose intolerant stuff. Ice cream can be the devil sometimes, and unfortunately for that sweet little thing, it is. Oh shit. Calling Max a sweet little thing. I'm going to have to gag myself with a spork for that little one. But nevertheless. She's so black and white when she talks to Ronnie, and I adore that. Ronnie needs a girl who's just going to say what's on her mind to him.

All in all, these first three chapters are pretty damn amazing. Max and Ronnie always make an amazing pairing, and you weren’t kidding when you said I would love this story. Three chapters in, and I already do. Max is beautiful, Ronnie is hilarious, and together, they make an interesting little duo. I can't wait to see what adventure goes down at McDonald's, and I hope Max gets a little bit of happiness, at least a possible friend who understands her.

But of course, what I really want is for Ronnie to fall madly in love with her and pursue her until she gives in, and then there's sweet romance and sexy fun.

Good luck and keep up the good work, darling. <3

xx Shay

Chapter Two

So, I like Ronnie for noticing Max despite the fact she is trying to keep a low profile to avoid people finding out about her secret. The boy with everything in the world takes the time to notice the shy, pretty girl sitting next to him, and he even goes out of his way to talk to her. I love that. It just paints a great big smile on my face to think about that.

What I really liked was how he refused to let her get away from him until he knew her name and had her agreeing to hang out with him. That's Ronnie's nature in a nutshell, not giving up until he gets what he wants, but it was directed at Max, and that's so fucking sweet. I want them to work out as friends, maybe as more if he knows how to treat her. I don't want him to end up hurting her because then I'll have to hate him, and my hate list is full at the moment. x3

Ronnie is written realistically as well, just as the typical guy who thinks he can get ahold of everything he wants, and I like seeing that in him. Most of the time, writers, including me, who write Ronnie emphasize the fact that his life sucked because of his dad having to work so hard, but I like that you've done it differently. It makes for an interesting read and just adds an even more unique spin to the whole story. It's quite lovely, if I do say so myself.

Like I said, my only hopes for Ronnie are that he treats her well despite his own horniness (yep, that's a word.), and that he doesn't hurt her when he finds out the secret that she's keeping from everyone. If he does, then I just hope someone goes out of their way to castrate his ass. She can't help being who she is, and I hope he can respect that and look beyond it.

xx Shay

Chapter One

First of all, thank you for not informing me you were currently writing this lovely storeh. -.- I would have liked to know ASAP so I could start commenting chapters, but now that I know, here are your three lovely comments for your three lovely chapters.

I'm already in love with Max as a character. The added in part of him (her? I'll stick with her for now.) being transsexual was very special and very unique, and I love unique things like that. I adore Max Green as it is because of the femininity your story is very clearly highlighting here. And I do believe she would make a beautiful young woman, so yes. <3

The way Max doubts herself just standing in front of the mirror is so real and sad that it hurts a little every time I read about that. The fact that she has to worry about passing as a girl until she can get her surgery reminds me of very real things, as you well know. I just wanted to lean into the story and hug her and assure her she's beautiful no matter what those bastards in her school think.

I love her little sister, though, telling her she looks pretty. Even though Zoey can't understand yet, I think she's exactly what Max needs to keep sane. That sweet little girl obviously loves her sister, and it's refreshing to see such sweetness. And the way Max's parents worry about her instead of trying to hover and snap at the rest of the world is nice. So often, parents just don't understand and refuse to believe their child is anything different than they think they are.

I feel bad for her, not having friends because she has to worry about what they would think if they found out about her. I'm so pissed off at the rest of the world for her because of that.

I hope everything works out for this sweet girl. I really do. <3

xx Shay

You didn't tell me you started. >.>
I'm reading currently. =3

I cannot wait for this. =3
I already subscribed. <3