March 29th, 2012 at 04:55pm
Adorable! I knew the lyrics of this song, one of my favorite songs of all time, would work wonderfully as dialogue. Someone reading this and not knowing that the dialogue is all lyrics would probably never even suspect! You fit it in very seamlessly and I absolutely adored it.
The layout is wonderful, too. But I expect nothing less from you! I love the characters and the way you slipped the background story in. I also really dig that you made her older than him. That isn't seen often in stories, by me anyway!
Over all, A+ work!
You captured the feeling of love like I have never read before. You did an amazing job expressing the love between two people and putting it into words that are easy to relate to. The whole time I was reading this I could remember the last night I spent with my boyfriend before he left town to go to college. This is such a cute story and I loved reading it.
It was really easy to relate to the characters and your writing went from one thought to another with ease. The while story was also easy to relate to because your writing is so easy to follow. I liked the sublte details you included and how you didn't over-describe anything. It was all around a perfect little lvoe story.
I think this story could turn into a really great chaptered story, or a prequal to another story. You are a really great author and you have a lot of talent. I really love this story!
Keep up the great work!! :)