Haunt My Heart. - Comments

  • Marissa1117

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    This is actually really great so far. I didn't read it when it was first posted, so, I'm reading it now and it's off to a great start. :)
    December 23rd, 2012 at 06:26am
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    OMGGGGGGGGGGGGG, THIS NEEDS UPDATINGGG
    December 22nd, 2012 at 10:47pm
  • pretty-eyed sarcasm

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    Comment Swap here!
    Right off the bat, you should look over your summary. You need spaces after all of the punctuation--it's really difficult to read otherwise.
    The same seems to go for the chapters themselves, as well as a few unnecessary capitalizations and some incomplete sentences. You may want to ask someone on mibba for grammar help if it's something you have trouble with.
    That said, I do like the characters and plot--especially the names, they're beautiful! Good luck!
    December 5th, 2012 at 11:05pm
  • squidgyyo

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    Update soon please? (:
    December 4th, 2012 at 04:58am
  • Forevergoth

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    I almost cried:( that was extremely sad.
    November 18th, 2012 at 05:57pm
  • black_rose3

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    oh no! thats so sad :(
    i hope it gets better for them
    but amazing chapter it made me cry i cant wait for the next one! :D
    November 17th, 2012 at 11:57am
  • lover of Ben Bruce

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    Update asap!! Great chapter
    November 15th, 2012 at 12:16am
  • squidgyyo

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    Oh no I wonder whats gonna happen next. I REALLY LOVE this story. Update asap? (:
    I am totally subscribing <3
    November 14th, 2012 at 06:19am
  • KaeBug

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    Poor Oli.... Ricky better not flip a tit. That's really hard to go through. Update!
    November 14th, 2012 at 04:14am
  • Harley_JesterMIW

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    this story is amazing.. please update!!!
    September 15th, 2012 at 05:14pm
  • Alyx Khaos

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    I love this story!
    July 27th, 2012 at 10:45pm
  • PrettyinBlack

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    Love the story! Update soon!
    July 24th, 2012 at 09:21am
  • sunshinebaybe

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    Totally amazing :)
    I'm glad Ricky took responsiblity over the baby
    July 15th, 2012 at 12:33pm
  • Jay.B

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    Oh my god, I was about to kick a puppy when Ricky kinda hinted that he didn't want the baby. But I'm glad he thought about it.
    July 11th, 2012 at 11:39pm
  • bloodnado

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    If I was her brothers, I'd poop my pants. And jump Ricksters.
    July 11th, 2012 at 10:26pm
  • black_rose3

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    When he was talking about not wanting the baby I thought I was going to cry!
    but I'm happy he's taking responsibility :D
    July 11th, 2012 at 06:16am
  • ILovePotatoes

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    I'm glad he's stepping up. That shows how much love he really does have for Olina :)
    July 11th, 2012 at 06:02am
  • Forevergoth

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    Ricky better be there for that baby and not just fake it for olina. But im happy he at least steped up to the plate :) now he just has to follow through!
    July 11th, 2012 at 05:32am
  • Jay.B

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    I hope to whatever god is up there that Ricky actually wants the baby and be there for it. Atleast he knows that its partially his fault.
    July 8th, 2012 at 03:29am
  • bloodnado

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    I'm going to prep myself for next chapter...I don't like being emotional when I read :P
    July 7th, 2012 at 09:34pm