Comment Swap here! Right off the bat, you should look over your summary. You need spaces after all of the punctuation--it's really difficult to read otherwise. The same seems to go for the chapters themselves, as well as a few unnecessary capitalizations and some incomplete sentences. You may want to ask someone on mibba for grammar help if it's something you have trouble with. That said, I do like the characters and plot--especially the names, they're beautiful! Good luck!
Ricky better be there for that baby and not just fake it for olina. But im happy he at least steped up to the plate :) now he just has to follow through!