I Never Meant to Be so Cliche - Comments

its been 11 years pls update

update!!!!...... plz

update!!!!...... plz

I've just read all of the chapters and I already love this story. Hope you update soon.

hey, um can u start updating this story again? I like it

Awww, poor Ronnie ): Baby Max is just so confused xD
Really good! :)

need moreeeeee :S

Oh my God
Oh my God
Oh my God
Oh my God
XD

I got so many answers in that!
And Ronnie and Max are together! <3
Yey, finally.
Well, finally for him remembering, I don't know if they're actually going to act together now.

I really love this.
It's so different to EVERYTHING.
The rebellion thing is really cool and I can't wait to see how everything turns out.

This is really getting interesting!

Y not being funny. THIS STORY IS AMAZING. DAMNI FELT LIKE I WAS READING AN ACTUAL BOOK. IT'S JUST. WOW.and maxes thoughts are similar to how i think. weird. and frank iero is in it and WOW.and this is actor perfect. please update :D

When you mentioned shortness and the name Frank and instantly thought Frank Iero xD
It doesn't really matter if it is him or not, but in my head he's Frank Iero haha
You update so fast! I LOVE IT!
You've done like two chapters in the past few days xD
I came on this today and was like
YES! LOADS OF CHAPTERS!
Two maybe isn't loads but they're really long as well. It must take you ages to do them haha

Last line: 'they lied' DUN DUN DUN :D
I seriously love a good last line in chapters!
I wanna know what Ronnie is.
I literally know nothing about monster stories and stuff like that so I couldn't even try to guess what he is
I'm assuming that our wikkle Max isn't human either...
We don't know properly why he's mute, do we?
I can't remember so I don't think it was said.
It must be something to do with the Ronnie thing and whoever wants to get Max killed though.
It must be.. Ithink haha

Next chapter :P
I love how much you say that people are monsters too :) Max is so in denial at the moment. Then again, if someone told me that there were monsters etc I'd probably just laugh in their face so... He's handling it better than me. Max wouldn't laugh though because he's mute... Hmmm
I LOVE THESE LINES! <3 He was telling me words. Words that were added to the words in my head, but they didn't make sentences. You did it again! xD
He's the last one... Interesting.

IT IS FRANK IERO!
There's no chance Gerard and Mikey can just be a coincidence haha I like that
And Frank's monster thing seems pretty cool. I've never heard of it, but you described it well.
With werewolves and vampires, i know what they're like and stuff, so I'm glad you explained Frank because I'd have no clue otherwise.

Ignorance is bliss. I missed that bliss right now. <3

That chapter explained so much. They're trying to take out the master and they're all one team and the new girl, who's name i still can't remember is with the Master. Ronnie used to be with the Master? Possibly.
I love this haha
And you've thrown some frerard in haha

AHHH i LOVE THIS STORIE! I can't wait for the next part (sorry for shouting) :)

Ahhh!!
You need to update!
like right now!
Do ittt!!!!

Much love,
-SapphireSky
xoxo

Oh my god, that last line seriously sent a shiver down my spine, okay. I think I forgot to mention how freakin' fabulous your writing is, there's not much dialog and you'd think that'd make it a bit boring, but it just really isn't and this thing has me wrapped around its little finger, I swear. Update soon! xx

What happens next. plz do some more.

(I kinda did a comment for each chapter... I got carried away)

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
It can't stop there!
Ahhh!
I wanted to keep scrolling and scrolling but I couldn't anymore!
I COULDN'T! D:
(Yes, I may be overreacting slightly haha)

I read that so fast. I couldn't look up from the screen at all. I had to find out what was going on.
Usually, I don't read stories with 'monsters' or whatever, but this is amazing. The description of how she changed from a girl to a... a that! was amazing. I could picture it all happening, which is something I didn't think I'd be able to do. I thought it'd just be like 'Yeah, I'm a monster now' and I'd have to picture a random monster thing, but you explained it all perfectly.

I ask again, WHAT'S GOING ON?
For a while, I was thinking, maybe new girl isn't that bad. She might be being nice. He house seems normal. No dead hookers on the walls or anything, then BOOM. New girl's trying to kill our Maxie.
She called him that, didn't she? I think she did... Ronnie calls him Maxie. :O A connection?! haha
And of course Ronnie comes to his rescue! He better save him with something magical. A kiss? ;)
I love this so much, though. I can't even explain it properly. I'm so hooked.

When she started with the flirting, my reaction was 'eww bitch, go away' and I genuinely thought that that was the worse she'd do, but no, she had to go all I WANNA KILL YOU on him. What a bitch...
The way you repeated I didn't want this, but I couldn't move. over and over and over was amazing. It really made the point. I was mentally screaming for Ronnie to come and save him from it. (I can't really say it's a her anymore)
And the thing about his voice being powerful, damn right it is! SCREAM!!!! The beast is stopped! <3

Aww Max. He needs Ronnie to help him to answer some of his questions now.

Oh, I remembered something. At the start when he was thinking about the girls, then realised he never met them </3 I felt so sorry for him. I can't imagine finding out that the memories that you always thought were part of you, never actually happened...

At the start of this, the layout didn't make sense to me. I thought it was going to be a random high school story about some mute kid. It makes so much sense now though! It's amazing. I usually can't read stories about a mute person because, I don't know actually, but this one, this one is so good. I can't stop reading.

I NEED MORE! (Imagine that in Max's voice. It means it must happen! haha)

There's two subscribers :O
I actually can't believe that.
This story is so perfect! More people need to read this!
I know it's not about how many people read it, but this definitely deserves to have more people interested. I feel sorry for the people not reading ;P

At the start this chapter has a really dark tone to it. Max was thinking about death and what little difference it'd make if he was gone (i have a feeling Ronnie would completely disagree with that)
And I love the conversation they ended up having. The way he answered the question so fast about his first memory told me that something was up. I have no clue what my earliest memory is, so I feel like he must've been told that that was a memory?... I don't know. It's bound to be something complicated.
The ending for this is perfect though!
I don't have a brother. DUN. DUN. DUN.
It seems like a normal memory though, nothing scary or spooky, so I've got no idea where it could've come from. I can't wait to find out though.

RONNIE'S NOT AN IDIOT! :D
He's actually really smart in this and I love that.
(I love everything)
The only criticism I have is the odd typo, which can be fixed just reading through. So practically everything in this is spot on perfect for me.
I love how Max's mind works... And how Ronnie knows how it works somehow...
WHAT DOES HE NEED TO REMEMBER?!
I can't wait to find out! :)

BOOM! XD
I'm loving the escape the fate reference at the end of that one! haha
But WHAT THE HELL WAS THAT?! :O The bit at the end with the 'master' and killing Max!? *collapse* haha
Damn! I knew that new girl was something. (I still don't know what). I want to understand what it's about but now I'm like 'WHAT?!" I can't wait for all that stuff to be explained.
It's a massive twist for me because I really wasn't expecting something like that. I was waiting for the cliche moment when they become friends, then more than friends. But THIS! Massive twist for me. Massive!

At the start when someone understood what he was saying, I actually jumped up and was like RONNIE! XD (I'm hyper...) and then it was Ronnie, so yey! I liked that bit <3

Do you know what else?
I LOVE THE WAY YOU WRITE!
You have no idea how much, seriously. At some points I had to stop and think about what you were saying because of how well it was worded. I think this writing style is perfect for this story. Max doesn't speak, so he has so much time in his own head, that his thoughts should be complex and have meaning. You've done that so well! Wow. Seriously! haha

I copied and pasted some lines I loved because, well, wow. Do you even realise how good they sound?!
abnormal is the cousin of cliché I stopped and my mind automatically went 'oh my god... that's true' xD
Speaking is a form of power, but it is also the ultimate weakness I love that line. I actually think it's a really important one as well. You can say so much by speaking, but saying the wrong thing will get you in trouble. I think this might relate to something at the end of the chapter as well. One of them said something about a voice being really powerful and I'm guessing that's Max's voice? God, this is so interesting! I just want to read on and on and on (AND I CAN :D There's more chapters to go haha)
The quicksand of education bit made me smile so much. I was sat thinking 'genius'. I LOVE THIS SO MUCH!
And the bit about the school being one body, and we were the mindless cells It's sort of like everyone's just going with the flow of things, not realizing, or even caring about how they're all part of a bigger picture.
The list of how people act about him being mute was a great touch as well!

This is so good. SO GOOD!
(Sorry if I don't make complete sense in these comments xD)

BOOM! XD
I'm loving the escape the fate reference at the end of that one! haha
But WHAT THE HELL WAS THAT?! :O The bit at the end with the 'master' and killing Max!? *collapse* haha
Damn! I knew that new girl was something. (I still don't know what). I want to understand what it's about but now I'm like 'WHAT?!" I can't wait for all that stuff to be explained.
It's a massive twist for me because I really wasn't expecting something like that. I was waiting for the cliche moment when they become friends, then more than friends. But THIS! Massive twist for me. Massive!

At the start when someone understood what he was saying, I actually jumped up and was like RONNIE! XD (I'm hyper...) and then it was Ronnie, so yey! I liked that bit <3

Do you know what else?
I LOVE THE WAY YOU WRITE!
You have no idea how much, seriously. At some points I had to stop and think about what you were saying because of how well it was worded. I think this writing style is perfect for this story. Max doesn't speak, so he has so much time in his own head, that his thoughts should be complex and have meaning. You've done that so well! Wow. Seriously! haha

I copied and pasted some lines I loved because, well, wow. Do you even realise how good they sound?!
abnormal is the cousin of cliché I stopped and my mind automatically went 'oh my god... that's true' xD
Speaking is a form of power, but it is also the ultimate weakness I love that line. I actually think it's a really important one as well. You can say so much by speaking, but saying the wrong thing will get you in trouble. I think this might relate to something at the end of the chapter as well. One of them said something about a voice being really powerful and I'm guessing that's Max's voice? God, this is so interesting! I just want to read on and on and on (AND I CAN :D There's more chapters to go haha)
The quicksand of education bit made me smile so much. I was sat thinking 'genius'. I LOVE THIS SO MUCH!
And the bit about the school being one body, and we were the mindless cells It's sort of like everyone's just going with the flow of things, not realizing, or even caring about how they're all part of a bigger picture.
The list of how people act about him being mute was a great touch as well!

This is so good. SO GOOD!
(Sorry if I don't make complete sense in these comments xD)

On Chapter 2 now
I was gonna do one comment at the end but I don't want to risk forgetting what I have to say haha
I don't know what to think of the new girl.
If I was Max, I'd be scared of her with the way she acted, even though she didn't know he was mute. But at the same time, I like that she's something different and I can't wait to see what sort of role she'll have on the story :)
You're so right about group work.
I hate it.
If I'm partnered with my friends I just mess around, but if I'm with people I don't know well I just get on with it quietly and awkwardly without doing the whole 'team' thing xD
Max doesn't want to do the team thing, but he did try to help the new girl (sorry- i forgot her name) so it shows that he's a good person and willing to help others.
I also loved how Ronnie was just like 'he's mute, obviously' because it means Ronnie does notice him and knows who he is and n'awwwwww! xD
No idea why but I love how Ronnie acted in this. He was doing the work, which was against the cliche for 'bad boys'. Well done :P
I really really love this!