Under the Waves - Comments

I think this was a very emotional and raw piece. I felt so bad for her, and I could almost feel her pain. Although I'm not a personal victim or anything, nor do I know anyone who has been raped, but the feeling of disgust and anger and brokeness (Idk if this is even a word)... I can't imagine it. You put it all together perfectly. As Miss Forgotten has said, there were a few errors here and there.

But she was wrong, the remind was everywhere. - This sentence felt kind of awkward? I don't know, how to change it though. But it might just be stylistic issues/personal opinions?

This made her feel uneasily as she quickly rearranged random items to make them seem for more fit. - This is just probably a typo/slip.

Typically to anyone else who would have saw room, they would’ve perhaps thought the apartment looked fine. - "saw" should be "seen the"

he threatened her before he suddenly slammed his waiting member into her private area as she yelped painfully. - Don't take this as an offense or anything, but I felt by adding "private area", it weakens the story? I know it sounds too vulgar to say vagina or something to that effect, but maybe by leaving it as "he slammed his waiting member into her…" ?

Other than that, this was a nice read. Well, heart-wrenching and gutting, but very good. It was gruesome at times when it needed to be, and dramatic at other times.

I like this! :D There weren't that many mistakes in grammar or spelling, nothing that can't be fixed by spellcheck haha

I couldn't read the entirety though. I'm sorry. It's just, personal victim heere, and I wrote what happened to me some time ago, and this just kinda brings it backk and ehh. I like to keep all that bad stuff away and locked up, haha.

From what I did manage to read though, was really good.You set the leery mood up perfectly, executing the main points of the story wonderfully, and all in all, it was great@ :)

First off, thanks for entering my contest and submitting something super early. Gives me something to do haha.
So, I'll be completely honest, original fiction isn't my thing. I could never really get into it, but I absolutely loved this. I absolutely adore the way your words flow and I'm honestly super jealous because if I could write like this, I'd do it a lot more often. You managed to make me interested in an original fiction. I could really feel the emotion, and it almost pained me to read it all the way. It was interesting how you managed to make a full story within one chapter, and it's not too long for a one-shot. You had everything you needed in there. The only thing I could say was I wish you'd gone on with the 81 reference, but it was in there and I could see how it was important to her. It would have been nice to have it in other places, too.
All in all, great job. :)
After adding in the bonus, your overall score is 64/61.
If you want an actual detailed summary of each point, message me, I have it all written down already. :)
And, dont' take the score too seriously, just because you have the highest score doesn't mean you'll win, and just because you have the lowest doesn't mean you don't win. You did fantastic <3

OMG this is amazing and sad at the same time.
Hope you win the contest :)