Camp Redwood - Comments

Oh wow, this story is so well-written! I love the characters. Aubrey is amazing and I like Keegan a lot. However, every character is so well-developed. I love this. Please, update soon. I don't think there's anything else to do with this story because it's already so amazing. Love this

I just finished the first chapter and already I am sucked in. The characters are enjoyable and the entire idea seems so original and creative. I love your use of a camp and not just group therapy at some weird church. I cannot explain to you the impact that every sentence that you wrote had on me. Bravo and I hope you continue to write on!

A very luring story I love it!!! <3

I have to admit that I was confused on the summary at first - I thought the quote were just that, quotes, it wasn't until I noticed the character list that I realized they belonged to your characters.

And I also have to admit that I've only just finished the first chapter so far, but this is amazing. Your characters seem well rounded and carefully developed. I just love Kalloipe! And I feel like I can find any of your characters in my real life (most from high school) and I love that this is so relatable.

I honestly have no suggestions. Keep it up! I'm off to read some more. ;)

I really like this. Its really interesting and well written. No major grammatical errors and some really intriguing characters. My only suggestion is that you put who's point of view we're in at the very top of the chapter, or change your layout so your chapter title can be seen. Otherwise you constantly have to switch back to the summary page in order to see who's POV we're in.

I wasn't expecting the ending of chapter one, wow. I had to continue reading when I got to the end; I wanted to know more. This story is so unique and admittedly, it's pulled me in a whole lot just by the first chapter.

Your descriptions are great, and like Donaghy said, it seems you've put a lot of thought into the characterization, which is a fantastic thing to do for stories. I will most certainly subscribe to this.

Great job. I can't wait to read more of this. (:

After the stunning revelation (it wasn't what I'd guessed) at the end of Chapter One, how could I not read on? This story is so interesting and it just pulls you in. The characters are really well defined - it seems that you've put a lot of thought into the characterisation. You just got one more subscriber.

The second chapter was hilarious. "What are prizes?" I laughed so hard. Aubrey is so cute. Keep writing. I love this story.

Seriously? I just read the first chapter and immediately fell in love with this story! That just goes to show you are one amazing writer! I like that each chapter are different point of views, also, it makes a log of sense in so many ways. The characters are super amazing and I can't can't CAN'T wait to see what happens next! :) layout is pretty great :)

First off, great layout. I'm a sucker for simple layouts.

Second, I'm a bit apprehensive about the number of narrations you have going on. I wish you the very, very best for continuing with them as separate people and tying the plot line for the grand finale.

Thirdly, despite the fact that the characters are being built and constructed so wonderfully, I feel as if they're being a little one dimensional. Like, we're only ever seeing the addicts in them and little else. However, I have little time on my hands and so therefore could not read right through till the last chapter.

If you work this right, you could turn it into an absolutely EPIC story. Great job! :)

I love the basic layout; the picture brings enough hope to not need so much brightness anywhere else :)
The summary confused me for a second because I thought they were a bunch of random quotes until it clicked in my head that they were quotes from your characters and that the actually gave a feel of who they are. I laughed at Kalliope's quote and sure enough, she was first on the list of chapters, haha.
Alright, so I read one section and gotta say it's pretty interesting. I would've thought Kaliope would get annoyed at the overly hyper roommate she ended up with, but at least she's trying, right? And yay, I wasn't wrong. Kaliope's thinking the same thing I did about her roommate's personality clashing with hers.
Damn, did not expect that to be the ending of the chapter, haha. Good twist.
I like the way this flows. Good job on it :)
Keep writing...until you finish this. Then write something else...and stuff!

Lupe. Lupe. Lupe. Lupe. Lupe. Lupe. Lupe.
I love all of your characters, but there is something about Lupe that I absolutely adore. Forrest is probably second on that list for me. Please update soon!!!!!!

First off, I'm going to say that I like your layout. It's simple and pretty. In the summary, I like how you have quotes from each of the characters. It's kind of like starting to get to know them.

I like it so far from what I've read. The characters seem to be unique and well developed, although the story line itself is something I've heard before. I do think you have personalized it nicely, though. The only thing I have to say is that having a lot of characters at once is a lot to process, so a story like this isn't something for me. I get confused when there are more than three main characters, but maybe it's just me.

Overall, good job on this.

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it is asking me to comment on your story again! I swear I've said everything I need to say and I sincerely apologize that it is asking to, once again, comment on your story. do I not have enough characters constantly or something because my past comments have been pretttyyyyy long on yours.

I guess I'm going to have to talk to someone about this reoccurring issue. well, keep on writing and good luck! <3

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Yessss! Yes Aubrey, you tell her! My goodness she makes me so happy, I love her. I hope she doesn't 'sleep' with Keegan all the time or else I'm going to start to ship them. Haha. I didn't realize that the characters were going to be random for chapters. It' cool, I hope Keegan is next. Cough. ;)

And so I finally had the time to finish reading your story! Man is this getting good. There's so much hate and flirting and it's just blowing me away. By the way, Keegan is like incredible. I have a love/hate relationship with him. Haha. I just want to know more about them all, it's scary how much I love them already. Aubrey though, she is so me it's ridiculous. Literally, ask anyone I know. I'm creeping myself out by comparing us right now. Anyway, I adore this, keep it up. <3 :D

This story is amazing! Like, I actually love it. You portray the characters so well and I feel like I really know them all. The point of views can get confusing, but you sort of figure it out and in the scheme of things it's a really small flaw! Keep updating and all that jazz! Love your writing style! I think my favorite character is Keegan. He's really interesting in the way he thinks and acts. Aubrey is kind of annoying, but lovable. Really good story! Keep it up!

This has a lot of narrators... Like, a lot a lot. This could get you in trouble in the future. How are you going to give each narrator their own plot? How are you going to tie them together? You also have a lot of dialogue going on. This keeps things interesting but it would also be nice to get a feel of what else is going on... Not just what is being said.

I feel a little bit...overwhelmed. Usually stories are interpreted with one point of view or two point of views but never more than that. you're using...7?
plus I think seven characters are a lot to just bring in at random. sometimes characters have their way of sliding and easing into the story, not just being thrown in. over the chapters they join the story maybe, but not right away. there's exceptions to that, but I was just a but overwhelmed. don't get me wrong, you're a very good writer and I enjoy your technique! I'd like to see where this story may go..although I feel like sometimes the words you use don't properly match with the sentence.

You know, I'm kind of intrigues by the seven people point of views unlike other readers. I like the fact that she's very secluded and to herself, which is totally understandable because she harms herself. Oddly enough, I'm only two chapters in and I'm very into Keagan's character. I also like the set up though people are hesitant towards it. I'm going to continue reading and I'm subbing. :) Expect more comments from me.

haaa i'm responding back on this through the comment swap thing on here.. :) anyways, i really, really like your story :) I think it is very interesting and I really Like Kalliope's character and Forrest's as well.. Aubrey is just a bit annoying to me and I completely dislike Keegan and Lupe for some reason, maybe because of the first chapter (they were total bitches) and well I like the story line and your writing style just makes this really easy to read and digest :) I'm def. subbing and looking forward to more :D