August 10th, 2014 at 09:58am
*Comment Swap*
To start off; I love the concept you have taken. Skin & Bones is such a beautiful title with so much depth and meaning. I often find that choosing a title is a lot harder than writing the actual story, and I normally just 'settle' on a title, but yours seems to set the entire story.
I know this has been said before, but the grammatical errors were quite off-putting, and I'm also not a fan of the white writing against the black background. Of course, this is only my preference.
Anyway, I'll stay subscribed just 'cause it sounds interesting!!
I can read it and truly see the setting and understand the feelings you wanted to portray into the story. i'm interested to continue reading as I haven't completed the whole thing yet but it sounds as though it is very interesting, I'd love to read more and see what direction the story takes. It truly depicts what I think a story should, clear detail and information about the setting. It’s something I often find hard to include in my own stories and I applaud the effort taken to completely entangle readers into the story itself. I love the detail of both content and of wording. It also presents good verbal communication amongst charters, which presents great detail as to what level the story is. I think that I will keep reading as best I can and may even subscribe to this story :) PS. Great writing and commitment to the story (if that’s not what all of what I have said meant??...)