Far From Never - Comments

Very unique, I like the topic (it's the kind of story I would read if I saw it in a bookstore). Even though there are some grammar mistakes it doesn't take anything away from the story. For a first original fiction it's fantastic. I really like it (sorry for the spam, this is my comment swap comment).

Really good! Very unique, even though there are some grammar mistakes it's really good. Love it!

Really good! Very unique, even though there are some grammar mistakes it's really good. Love it!

First thing: Summary. You should always start with a good, strong summary. I really like the dialogue but I think it would add a little humph to it if you put some more information in there. What kingdoms? Why have they been at odds over such a toy? Etc. Chapter One: I really liked the first chapter, how you kind of get a feel of things. No complaints. Chapter Two: You tend to shift through the past and present tense, it’s kind of confusing. Short chapter, but still a rather interesting one. Chapter Three: I understand why you would put this here but it needs a little more detail. Other than that the rest of your story was really good and I enjoyed it!

Okay so I finished, yes I hope you like the double comment. :)

I don't understand how people could get confused by your name choices. I know an Izaiah, that's not an uncommon name. Davina is a beautiful name by the way. And I adore Langston, I picture him as a big ole teddy bear.

The only name related thing that confuses me is Elisha. It's Elisha Morgan, and yet her father calls her Morgan Elisha. And she's formally known as Princess Morgan, and yet I don't understand why her father would switch the two, unless her hates her. Which I doubt that's the case.

I think I'm in love with Victor by the way, if I had to pick a girl that I'm more like it's Davina and she is lucky as hell that she gets to marry Victor. Lucky girl.

Anyway, I adore this, you should really update soon. :)

I'm only a couple of chapters in but I'm so intrigued I had to comment.. This is so amazing compared to other things I've read here! I like how it has modern concepts but is set in a old royal setting. I'm so glad I ran into this. :)

First thing I want to say is, what language are the chapter names in? It looks like Gaelic. Second, I like this a lot. There are a few teeny grammatical and spelling errors, but then again I am a total grammar freak/human spell check. Also, I can’t tell if this is supposed to be in the past or the present or the future or what. Some of the customs and behaviors seem old-fashioned, but the dialogue is very modern, which is a bit confusing. And you sometimes switch from past tense to present tense and back again, also confusing. Would you maybe describe the scar on Izaiah’s shoulder from Victor’s sword? That sounds really weird and cool. Your plot is interesting, and I can’t wait to read more.

i really like what i've read so far. it's a really fresh idea, i like it. it's really in with that game of thrones/lord of the rings thing that's really big right now, and it's a nice thing to be big.

the dialogue is realistic, and the story is really intriguing. i'm really hooked in, and i can't wait to finish this comment and carry on reading! there are a couple of grammatical errors, but i'm probably just being picky! other than that it's great! <3

This is actually a very unique story. There are a few grammar errors. That would be missing commas and capitalization with the dialog. The unexpected twists in here are fab, and I want to read on even though at first I was a bit skeptical.

Grammar and Style - You did a pretty good job writing this. I don't really see any errors aside from a few missing commas. I do think there is a little too much dialogue in places, especially in the second chapter.

Setting - I like that this has a very unique setting. The realm is interesting and is the perfect place for this story to be set in.

Characters - I'm not going to lie, I found the character's names to be a little bit distracting, but that's just me. I do think they are interesting, though.

Plot - From what I've read, the plot is very interesting. I'd like to see some more twists and turns in the next couple of chapters.

I really like the interactions between the characters; the dialog is quite funny in places. (Note on the dialog: when a line of speech has finished, you need a comma before the second set of speech marks. For example, “Everything” I murmur in response, there needs to be a comma before the tag.) Other than that, this is a good story. The tension is good and the character development is good.

First things first I like the use of gaeilge in the chapter descriptions, there are a few spelling grammar mistakes there, but don't worry about it. We study it for years here and most of us still struggle with it :P The layout is gorgeous. I really like this story, it's highly original and I can't wait to read more of it!

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I really like this story.again with the names are a bit odd but that's okay. I like the way you developed your characters and their relationships. Keep writing because I wanna read more. Keep on keeping on.
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I enjoy this, like a lot. The layout is beautiful and so is the story. I do love me the unique names, but when I have to take a good deal of time to figure out how they are pronounced, it can get a bit irritating. Other than that, I'm excited to see how this story grows.
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I like this so far! I was a bit iffy at first but then I began to read more of it and found that I really enjoyed it. I really wish I knew what the chapter titles meant though. Perhaps you could include that somewhere. Like in the author's notes or chapter description or something. But anyway, I've only noticed a few easily fixed typos and your story is really great. I especially love stories that take place in a time and setting so different from ours. So good job!

I've commented already. So:

Fucking God, it's amazing. I read the summary and was like, "I don't think I'll like this." But as I read I found myself enthralled in your wonderful way of words, they basically rolled off the page and into my mind. It was wonderful. I want to read more. I think you should keep writing. <3

Fucking God, it's amazing. I read the summary and was like, "I don't think I'll like this." But as I read I found myself enthralled in your wonderful way of words, they basically rolled off the page and into my mind. It was wonderful. I want to read more. I think you should keep writing. <3