I Live to Love You - Comments

@ ironi1234
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So I don't actually know anything about the movie, though after reading this you made me want to watch it. I felt a bit lost because of this but I suppose people who know the movie don't have that problem.

Anyway I really enjoyed your writing style. You describe things in a marvelous way. I enjoyed reading this. Well done!

I'm here to deliver a Halloween treat ^^

Okay, so I'm clueless about the fandom and characters, so I can't comment on OOC types of stuff.

You describe things very well in the story, and our sentences flow together very well. Personally, I love the line 'the zombie-like lull his life had become'. It's just an excellent way to describe something, and I think it works really well int he context of the story.

I came across a few minor things in terms of grammar. As megurine luka explained, there are some problems with the dialogue. Some things don't read as smoothly as they should, but all that should take is a quick red-over. I think you've done a great job, and I enjoyed this, even without knowing anything about the fandom! Happy Halloween! :)

You're a really good writer it's just that this is not my kind of stories that I read. So that's why I don't get stuck in them

I think you mixed some of the scenes in the movie. I don't know. Anyways, I think this is a good piece since you described most of the events well.

“It’s me Duckie.” Said a soft voice from
^ The period should have been a comma and the 'S' in 'said' should be in the lowercase.

You have some problems with your dialogues and I suggest you look it over. It's just minor; not knowing when to put a period or a comma.

I actually ship Blaine and Andy I had mixed feelings about this.

You got yourself an 80's lover right here. Of course I instantly loved this story. It was very cute and set me in the mood for romance myself.

Hello! So I got this story off of comment swapper and I really enjoyed reading it! Your words flowed easily and made this story easy to read and you also put in adequate details in it to make the readers create pictures in their head. I really enjoyed this story and you are an awesome writer. Keep it up!

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Firstly, I LOVE Pretty In Pink! I am a total sucker for 80's movies and Pretty in Pink was my second favorite after the Breakfast Club which is THE most timeless of classics.

Anywho, I liked the background and layout. It's simple and neat and there's nothing better than a neat layout! This is also going to sound weird but I really like the little design things that separate the paragraphs. That sounds weird but I always think when people have those it just looks really nice. Okay.

I felt for Duckie, man. He was in the classic friend-zone which sucks big time. I like how this was in his point of viewish and told what he was feeling about Andie and what she went through and all of that. I thought this was so adorable with how he stood up for her and then at the end when they kiss! Just AGH SO CUTE! :D

I've never seen this movie before so I was a tad bit lost between the characters but the words you strung together for descriptions were amazingly well put. Like i said, it was a bit hard for me to follow but still you did a wonderful job and I'd imagine you did this film justice.

This was good! A few spelling and punctuation errors, but that could just be typos (I'm horrible about that kind of thing.) Pretty in Pink is one of my favorite movies, and this is the first fanfiction I've come across for it. The way that you put what Duckie must have been feeling into words was pretty amazing -- great job!

First off, I really enjoy the simplicity of the layout you chose to use. The background photo is vibrant, but it isn’t distracting as I read, which is nice. The black text on light gray is also relatively easy to read. I also liked the summary that you used because I got a grasp on what the tone of the story was without giving too much of the plot away, which is exactly what I feel a good summary should do. I’ve actually seen Pretty in Pink, and although it’s not my fave 80s film (I can’t stand Molly Ringwald ), I did find Jon Cryer to be adorable in the film, so I’m sure this piece will be entertaining. Aside from a couple Breakfast Club fics, I can’t say that I’ve read that many fanfics based on 80s film, so I praise the unique fandom that you chose to write about.

Overall, I thought this piece flowed amazingly. You did a great job with the descriptions, and I love that you not only focused on the visual imagery, but the auditory and sensory imagery as well, which was really refreshing because it’s been a while since I’ve read a fic that provoked all the senses instead of focusing only on the visual aspect of things. I think you did a great job further developing Duckie as a character and showing a more emotional side to him that isn’t shown so much in the film. I also think that you did an amazing job showing the relationship between Andie and Duckie, as well as the conflict that Duckie feels for being in love with his best friend and selfishly wishing that her relationship doesn’t work out. The ending was also really great because I felt like the optimism of the ending helped to balance out all of the intense emotion and angst that Duckie experiences throughout the course of the story.

There are quite a few grammatical errors in this piece, such as missing commas and apostrophes, but I’m not going to point each one out because I don’t want this comment to turn into nothing but editing. Although I loved the way that you expanded on Duckie’s story, I think I would’ve enjoyed the piece more if you had developed more of your own plot instead of just adding on to scenes that were in the film.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this, and it was obvious that you put a lot of thought and effort into writing the piece, and I appreciate that. Thanks for entering!