Temptation - Comments

you know if you would just use words like to and the and add s's and ed's where they need to be then the errors wouldn't be so bad. i really like this story but it's really difficult to read

@ M Shadows's Girl
Hahaha Yes, sorry for that xD haha

@ FaBzShadows
So very demanding

AAHHH Moree NOW xDD

@ FaBzShadows @Jesse711 you guys should check unholy confession tell me what u think

Finally!!!!!!!!
Now, update again! Like NOW!

Finally I've been waiting for an update for days, more !!!

WHAAAAAAAT! NO! No cliffhangers! Update this soon! :DD

What fuck Matt seriously... .__. e,e Yes there a few mistakes, but the story is good, seriosuly more soon! :DD

@ sketchawkward
I have editor but she hasn't been editing so I going try get another to edit then repost edit I just really want them out

i love this story but you should look into getting a beta the grammar is atrocious and it makes it difficult to read if i had a computer i would do it for you but sadly i only have my phone

Cute little chapter !!

First off, there is a lot of grammar mistakes in this. It seems you like to write like I used to write a long time ago. Instead of writing like: I jumped then turn to see Matt leaning in my doorway. He look so good just standing there like that. His big muscular arms was crossed against his chest.

Try writing like I jumped then turned to see Matt leaning in my doorway. He looked so good just standing there like that.

I'm sorry that just really bugs me but, it's your story and you're allowed to write it the way you want it. I was just giving a few pointers. If you would like anymore, feel free to message me. :)

On another note, I really like this idea as a story. It has amazing potential. <3

*rubs hands in a machiavellian way* xD Can't wait more. You shall update now! xD Hahaha

Omg I like this story. I hope you continue it soon.

i quite like this