If Skies Would Weep - Comments

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I can't even express how much I love the layout! It's so original and eye catching :) This is such an original plotline and probably one of the best I've read so far. Sometimes, though, I felt like I had to re-read sentences a few times because they were so...intricate (bad word to describe it) that I didn't really get it the first time. Anyway, I hope you take this off hiatus because this is a really amazing start.

I love how this is written like a myth or a history. There's so much incredible intricate story-telling woven into it, along with some much history. However, I never feel like I'm listening to a lecture or reading a textbook. There's a lot of life and movement in the very necessary words.

This is one of the most original storylines I've seen on Mibba and in general. These aren't angels, but you've created them similar to angels in a way that we have a clearer vision in our mind.

I love the relationship between the Cloud dwellers and the humans. It makes me wonder if the humans would have been better if they knew what they were doing--probably not.

I also love how this race is superior, but they're referred to as 'older' instead. The race doesn't need to feel superior to be it.

I'll be coming back to read the rest!

Wow, this story is amazing! This is one of the most original concepts I have ever seen on Mibba and you wrote it so well!

I really loved this line: "Hopelessness was present too now, as the Cloud dwellers wandered around with heavy, broken wings, and the young ones feared their almost-inevitable Fall." The way you describe how they are feeling through physical descriptions is just amazing!

I love all of your description and how there was almost no dialogue. You didn't rely on conversations to tell your story and I really like that!