A Beauty in Disguise - Comments

  • Daydream-Believer

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    Hey guys, Thankyou for the comments it means a lot to know that people like my stuff :) I shall try and update a bit more regularly. If you have any ideas for the rest of the story feel free to message me them and you never know I might use them :3

    Lauren x
    January 14th, 2013 at 04:48pm
  • ryan.berch

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    This story is soooo good i NEED MORE NOW!!!!!!!! i really do like this story
    January 14th, 2013 at 06:10am
  • ryan.berch

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    i just rye don chapter 10 its soooo good and soooo sad great job :) (although im only on chapter 10)
    January 14th, 2013 at 06:03am
  • INACTIVExx

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    So.. i like the idea of the story.. but i am just not so keen on the whole emo thing... ugh.. anyways, it made me laugh a little ( the whole suicidale tendencies band thing cause it is a real band but it's more of a punk/hardcore thing and also the fallen angels just sounds a bit childish to me i dunno).. besides that, you have little errors which is good though maybe slowing down a bit and being a bit more clear on who is who.. after a while I just got lost in who was the prep and who the 'emo' kid.. i dunno.. and also, maybe try not to repeat yourself so much, i think that would help :)

    besides that, good job and keep it up. and i hope i don't sound like a bitch, it's just my opinion :/ no harm intended.
    June 8th, 2012 at 08:18pm
  • TheLastAvenger96

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    I like the way you brought her ex back into it, very good! :)
    June 6th, 2012 at 10:07pm
  • avid reader

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    A very good story lines. A few discrepancies if I want to be really picky but other than that very good so far!
    May 1st, 2012 at 10:08pm
  • TheLastAvenger96

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    I actually can't believe no one else has commented -.- anyway update soon :) x
    May 1st, 2012 at 10:04pm
  • TheLastAvenger96

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    Very original :) I love the way this is written, update soon! :3 x
    April 26th, 2012 at 10:01pm