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Holy shit, this is so perfect!

Love it <3 please update soon :)
Those pills better not be anything bad... Hopefully Fun Ghoul's okay

Love it <3 please update soon :)
I actually cried at the bit where they found out Fun Ghoul was missing :(

I mean Fun Ghoul possiblY dying was already bad enough, but now Gerard has a hold of anti-depressants so I sense an addiction forming -.- You're slowly torturing my heart. Please let Fun Ghoul be ok and return and make Gerard better. Omg if he really is brainwashed, I don't even know what will happen to my emotions! YOU WILL HAVE WRUNG THEM OUT!

"but I was more angry with myself for seizing it as an opportunity to protect everyone else without considering how to protect him. I felt guilty for not doing more to protect him." I think my heart just broke. I know you struggled a lot with this chapter and really getting in touch with the strong emotions, but wow, I think you did it pretty well. I felt like Gerard was so lost. Like he was narrating his feelings in an almost robot and unenthusiastic way and I think that was beautiful. If it got too descriptive, it would have been weird and distracting, but this just got to the point and that definitely helped me as a reader feel his pain. Gah, I'm crying. Fun Ghoul better be okay, I'm already a wreck I can't handle much more :'(

The wait was worth it <3. Poor Fun Ghoul :(.

IT WAS AMAZING !! i loved the update

Oh my god! Poor Gerard and Frank! Please tell me Dr.D just made a mistake.

Update soon!

WHY, LAUZZ, WHYYY!!!!
That was heartbreaking. The story has just started so he CAN'T be dead! Ugh, update as soon as you can! Phenomenal job as usual <3

I'm sitting here like OMG DONT DIE! NO! I can't wait for the next chapter <3

Agh I told you not to kill anyone and you end the chapter saying "They'll get themselves kid" so not reassuring, now I'm scared! But I can't wait for more!!!

Oooh! This is nice. I was sucked in just from the summary. I'm an MCR fan but, I liked how you described everything for the people who aren't. It sort of puts you in the world with the characters. (Does that even make sense?)

Chapter 3 had me in tears at the end there.
Chapter 4 Oh God, please keep Lucid safe for forever. I can't even imagine what an emotional wreck I'll be if something happens to her, or Venom even. I'm already getting too attached to these characters, ugh
Chapter 5 ahhhh I know you were apprehensive about writing this chapter, but the emotion was perfect. It was just the right amount of tense fear, I got very emotional. Amazing job and please update soon <3

I do love the detail you've put into this and appreciate the backstory/origin of the fandom as I had no inkling of what this story would be about.

But I still feel a little lost, I didn't feel as if I knew who exactly your character was or where they were in relation to the story at that moment.

Considering your not-unsightly writing style, I'm sure it'll turn out to be a great story. Though I think it seems a little too complex for me to grasp at the moment.

Because I'm not incredibly familiar with the fandom you've written in, I have to say that I do appreciate that you actually put a lot of effort into establishing the universe so that the reader doesn't have to know the fandom to be able to comprehend and enjoy the story. That being said, I did feel like this first chapter read like a bit of an info dump, and it would've flowed much better if you had woven in the background information instead of just laying it all out in the first few paragraphs.

I enjoyed the style that you wrote this in, and I thought the flow was impeccable. The only bit of concrit that I have to offer is that I would've liked to have gotten a better grasp on the narrator as an individual in the opening chapter.

I love the whole connection between Lucid and Venom, first off; you can really feel the strength of their relationship. The fight between Ghoul and Poison was sad though :( I feel bad that they have to leave each other, but I understand how Ghoul got so irritated. They're supposed to be in it all together, and splitting up even for a day definitely wouldn't be in my plans either. I hope they don't end up breaking up! I really think you did a wonderful job with this; your descriptions are great and how you describe each character is wonderful. It makes it easy to connect with them and really feel bad for Ghoul, Poison, and even Lucid and Venom. I hope you update this more, because I feel like you could go really far with it. :)

ty for updating i love it

i love your story. surprised there are no comments