Magically I Turned Tragedy Into Melodies - Comments

I've never been a fan Escape The Fate but this is lovely written :)

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I was really excited to get your story there were a few things that bothered me though. So I'll start of with some negatives. I felt the paragraphs were too short and I would have liked to see some length. Also there were most of the dialogue bother me; Ronnie spoke and then Kaitlyn replied or vice versa and both their sentences were in the same paragraph. I was taught to seperate the two but I dunno maybe its different in the States. However, I don't think you really need to change anything that's just my opinion. The layout is really cool too.
I think this is one of the most promising stories. Couldn't find anything too bad that I'd suggest you to change. I'm really enjoying this story and I'll read on!

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I'm not too familiar with Escape the Fate or Falling In Reverse, though I have heard some good comments about them from a friend of mine, but this is really good. You don't have to know much about the band or the band members to get what's going on, which is a plus. One thing though, the layout is kind of blinding. The bright purple on black is kind of hard to read, so try to tone that down, but anything else really great. :) Good job! :) Keep up the good work.

An interesting story for sure. I agree with the other person, your dialogue is good between the characters, but a little more detail would be a plus. Your interactions and descriptions are good. You are good at writing though and I like the writing style for sure.

I really don't like Escape The Fate or Falling In Reverse, but to each his own, I guess. I can tell from just the first chapter that you have talent with writing. So far I've seen very few grammatical errors, which is a big plus. What your writing could use is a little more detail. You've got plenty of dialogue, but not enough detail to balance it out. I do like the way you made Katelyn originally think Ronnie was a "run of the mill rockstar bad boy", because I can relate to that. There is one concern about paragraphs that I cannot let slide. Only one person's dialogue can be in a paragraph. If you're just adding it to a sentence like "He muttered a quick "goodbye" before leaving" then it's fine, but when it's not like that, you must begin a new paragraph.
Besides that, this story has an interesting plot and I'd like to see where it's going. Just try more detail! Keep it up!

i love this story i cant wait to read more :D

seems to be a good story! :) continue <3