Reality Like a Dream - Comments

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Jean is a solid character, and her interactions with Jordan are very well thought-out. Sometimes the dialogue is a little unnatural, though. What I would suggest is to go back and read conversations out loud. If it feels and sounds unnatural as you're saying it, you may want to consider rewriting. Don't be afraid of slang and colloquialisms; they make your dialogue seem more natural and realistic.

It's not bad, but I'm afraid that I have a hard time getting behind fanfictions about real people. I'm sure that you have an excellent time writing it, and your grammar is, overall, very good! B)

Ahh didn't expect that one to be the last chapter! So freaking excited for more though!!!

You can't just leave us hanging right there!!

I knew that was coming!!!!!

LUV this story!!!! Update soon

Love this story. I wish they would learn to communicate without yelling at each other!!

Yay! Two chapters to read! Jean seriously needs to pull it together or she'll be on crutches when she walks down the aisle lol

I have a live/hate relationship with goodbyes. You captured both beautifully:)

These two are so dang cute!!

I literally laughed out loud at the "grunting like a gorilla" part. Too funny!

Hot hot chapter!!! They really are so good together:)

The first part made me teary eyed! I'm so glad they're all cute again!

So happy to see this updated!!

Yay! Good luck with school :)

@ nomountainhighenough
The next chapter is in production!! I just can't say when it will be out; I started school today and it's gonna get hectic

Are you going to continue soon? I can't wait for more!

Holy crap I didn't see that coming at all!!!! Don't leave us hanging!

i cant deal with this I hope jean forgives him ... please please please I hope Jordan doesn't do some thing stupid with heather

Ugh make Heather go away. She's not needed or wanted here lol. Poor Jordan!!!!