Everyone Has a Story - Comments

First off, I have to agree with the below comment - I thought this was going to be the story of a girl who has a crap life playing in a bar every night, etc. etc. But this really took me by surprise. It was simple, yet beautiful and captivating. I like that we never found out no-name's name or his story, because it leaves a sense of mystery.

The ending is so open, leaving things to the reader's imagination, and that's something that I always tend to love about stories.

For something that you came up with at random, this was very well done. =)

Everyone Has A Story really caught my attention because I had thought that this would be another short and sad story of a person who has a suck-ish life. The plot of this story is something that I would get to read from other writers, to be honest.

However, the way you have written it was the reason why I continued reading; knowing what she could possibly do in the end, I could have just clicked the back button.

But I stayed, and did not regret finishing it. :)

For the MM Writing Contest:
This flowed really well. It felt like one night to me, not feeling like it dragged on or went by too quickly. You have her do almost the same thing for the majority piece - play the music - but you change how you write about it, giving it flare and a new look even though she's just been described doing it seven sentences back. You also have her describing what she sees, giving us an insight to the different characters that are mentioned and they all feel realistic to me. Well done for that. This was really good.

For the magazine contest.
I absolutely loved this piece! I love that you had varying sentence structure throughout the piece and it wasn't just one statement of fact after another. Your description was detailed and elegant, and really added the extra oomph to this piece.
There was a nice introduction to the character and the events in the story, even though it was so short.
I really enjoyed the way you talked about the music, especially because that is something I really struggle with describing. You did it really well and I was really proud of that. Overall, I was very pleased with this piece, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!