Don't You Dare Let Go - Comments

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I think it was very well written. The grammar and spelling was very good as well. I personally don't know of the band but that doesn't take away from the fact that the story is very good. I'll definitely have to take a look into them. Can't wait for more chapters (: keep up the good work

I'm not usually a fan of POV but this was pretty well written. Your character development was good and the plot well written. The paragraphs are kind of long, which makes it hard to read. There weren't many mistakes I could personally spot out so that was nice and I don't even know who these people are but you had me interested. Good job!

I don't really know the band very well but I liked the way the story was written and Garrett seems like a sweet heart eventhough I don't know the band I am still subscribing because I like the storyline so much I am really interested in seeing why Zena ran from them in the first chapter. Oh by the by I am here from comment swap:) I like the way you developed the harachters not doing the obvious my name is this and I like that etc. which I sometimes have to resort to. But you magically introduced the characters and the storyline without having that obvious effect I am super excited to see what is going to happen with this story. Grammar wise your good and I like your writing style it's quite captivating and easy to read. It isn't to wordy and you get down to the point without all the fluff which I highly praise you for . Often times you read stories with sooo much deatail it gets boring but as I reiderate your story is skillfully written and enticing. Keep up the good work and update soon:)

I am a fan of The Maine and I thought you've pretty much got there personalities wrapped, I liked the theme and thought your Summary was good and it made me want to read on, I agree with the comment below and I don't like how you used to change tenses, maybe you should use to make the text for past tenses Italic because the way you have used to inform people about the change in times does sometimes confuse people. I do think you are a good writer though and could do well so I hope you keep writing. I hope my comment helped :)

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As I’ve no personal interest in the band, I can’t really comment on the style of characterisation and whether or not you depend on the public persona. I don’t like your long note on the summary page and I don’t like the random ‘/\/\ /\/\ /\/\ /\/\ /\/\ /\/\’ that you use to break up/change the tenses (which can confuse and annoy). I also really don’t understand why you feel the need to write ‘people still go on & read fanfictions!’ Did you make a mistake? And I don’t see why you published the date you published the chapter. I just…why? Your writing style is minimalistic and doesn’t have a lot of emotional detail, keeping your characters plain, and I’d add a good solid character page to combat this. Good luck with this.

I read the first chapter of this on fanfiction AGES ago I think! AND I'M SO HAPPY THAT I FOUND IT HERE BECAUSE I HAD WANTED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENED :D

I really like how this story starts in the present but then goes to the past. The paragraphs flow really nicely and their content is intriguing and well written. I also love how you wrote "He starts to play a song called 'Into Your Arms'" because some people may not know what that is (some people live under rocks) and I love when writers write like their readers are clueless to things. No sarcasm! Awesome job :)

I really really like it. Everything about it is perfect, from plot to grammar! Can't wait to read more!

from the comment swap! the maine are kind of this awful guilty pleasure of mine, so i have no idea why i dont read more of their fanfictions. but this is good! i like the paragraph breaks, and the sentence flow, they're rarely choppy so it makes it easy to read. i like the flashbacks/stories, it added an interesting element to the latest chapter. overall, nice job!

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I’m sorry but I dunno who Maine is *shrugs* but I actually really enjoyed reading this story anyways. I like your use of paragraphs and the story line in general. I like the characters. I can’t say anything bad about it but I thought it was generally good. =)

Hey, I'm from comment swap :)

I don't like the Maine's music but I tend to like their fanfictions. This fic was really well written and had a nice plot flow. Your grammar and spelling were flawless and I wish you luck with your writing, this deserves a lot more readers than it has.

Hey I was brought to your story thanks to comment swap and I cannot tell you how happy I was when I say that it was a 'The Maine'. This made me want to read it however was disappointed that it was only two chapters long and I hoping that you are going to be adding more chapters on to that soon! I also like how lengthy your chapters are! They contain lot's of detail which I enjoy I would love if you could continue with this story and update soon!

So, I really enjoy this story, and I think I may want to stick with it. However, I'd like to make a few suggestions. First of all, be REALLY careful with your word choice; there were a few spots in the story where awkward words made me lose my footing in the story and have to read a sentence more than once, and thats not good. Just a bit of practice though, and you'll get it down :) Also, I like how you have the narrator conversing with your readers, just be careful that you keep your tenses consistent (i.e were, was. etc)

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I have heard of The Maine but I've never listened to them. However, I do like this storyline. I recommend you break up the first paragraph of the first chapter. It's really long and it's hard to get through. Other than that, you're golden!

This is beautiful! *wipes tears* haha seriously I love this & I can't wait for the next update. Xx

I really really the opening! It draws you in and made me really want to know what had happened between the three of them in the past. Excited to see it all pan out. And I love Zena. She's feisty and funny, and a little quirky. It was fun seeing her POV, so first person was a great choice for this story. I don't think it would be as interesting in third person or fro anyone else's POV...
Have you ever had a beta - someone to read/edit the chapters before you post them. Because there were a few mistakes that I caught. Switching of tenses, extra/missing words. Your writing isn't bad by any means, but everyone could benefit from a second pair of eyes. We all miss some things.

Overall, this is a great start to your story. Cannot wait for more! <3